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A friend has asked you to babysit on Saturday and wants to know how much you charge per hour for this. Unfortunately, you already have a commitment this weekend and cannot help. However, you are free the following weekend. v.1

A friend has asked you to babysit on Saturday and wants to know how much you charge per hour for this. Unfortunately, you already have a commitment this weekend and cannot help. However, you are free the following weekend. v. 1
Dear Bella, Hope you are doing fine and enjoying the season. I am so happy that you asked me to babysit Anna for you. She is such an adorable child and I love spending time with her. I would be happy to babysit her for you but due to my exam at the university the next Monday, I am afraid I cannot spare time on Saturday. However, I will be free the next week and would be happy to look after her if you want. I will be horribly busy studying this whole week and during the weekends as I have an important exam next Monday. My term final result will depend on this exam and I have to dedicate my time to prepare for it. I hope you understand that I cannot spare time before my exam even after I wish I could. However, I will be free the next weekend and would like to babysit for you in case you go out then. As I remember, I charged you 20 dollars an hour last time and the charge would be the same this time as well. In case you need my service for more than 8 hours a day, you should inform beforehand. With lots of love. Yours truly, Emma
Dear Bella,

Hope you are doing fine and enjoying the season. I am
so
happy that you asked me to babysit Anna for you. She is such an adorable child and I
love
spending
time
with her. I would be happy to babysit her for you
but
due to my exam at the university the
next
Monday, I am afraid I cannot spare
time
on Saturday.
However
, I will be free the
next
week and would be happy to look after her if you want.

I will be
horribly
busy studying this whole week and during the weekends as I have an
important
exam
next
Monday. My term final result will depend on this exam and I
have to
dedicate my
time
to prepare for it. I hope you understand that I cannot spare
time
before
my exam even after I wish I could.
However
, I will be free the
next
weekend and would like to babysit for you in case you go out then.

As I remember, I charged you 20 dollars an hour last
time
and the charge would be the same this
time
as well
. In case you need my service for more than 8 hours a day, you should inform beforehand.

With lots of
love
.

Yours
truly
,

Emma
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS letter A friend has asked you to babysit on Saturday and wants to know how much you charge per hour for this. Unfortunately, you already have a commitment this weekend and cannot help. However, you are free the following weekend. v. 1

Letter
7 paragraphs
211 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resources: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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