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Your friend recently had a new baby born and you have bought him/her a present. Write a letter and say- What is the present? - Why did you choose it? - Arrange a visit to pass on the present and see the baby. v.2

Your friend recently had a new baby born and you have bought him/her a present. Write a letter and say- What is the present? - Why did you choose it? - Arrange a visit to pass on the present and see the baby. v. 2
Hi brucee! I hope you find this letter in good condition and health! I came to know that my princess had born in last Friday. I was extremely excited and overwhelmed to hear such good news from kelly at the restaurant. Soon I would visit Montreal next weekend to see my adorable little princess. Even though I had bought a present for my angle. It is very difficult to select a toy for me. Finally, Ellena suggest me an amusing gift that is barbie doll. It has a blue eye with shaded brown hair. Barbie has worn a red dress. In fact, this model is based on artificial intelligence features. It would be helped to entertain whenever the baby crying. It is able to sing, dance, and perform motions. As I earlier said, I am eagerly waiting to see her. So I am coming on next weekend on Sunday to see my adorable princess. Please let me know if it is good for you. I am waiting for your response. Regards, Jassica
Hi
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brucee
!

I hope you find this letter in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
condition and health!

I came to know that my princess had born in last Friday.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
was
extremely
excited and overwhelmed to hear such
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
news from
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kelly
at the restaurant.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Soon
I would visit Montreal
next
weekend to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
my adorable
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
princess.

Even though
I had
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
a present for my angle. It is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
difficult to select a toy for me.
Finally
,
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Ellena
suggest me an amusing gift
that is
barbie doll. It has a blue eye with shaded brown hair. Barbie has worn a red dress. In fact, this model
is based
on artificial intelligence features. It would be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
to entertain whenever the baby crying. It is able to sing, dance, and perform motions.

As I earlier said, I am
eagerly
waiting to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
her.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
I am coming on
next
weekend on Sunday to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
my adorable princess.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know if it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
for you.

I am waiting for your response.

Regards,

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Jassica
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS letter Your friend recently had a new baby born and you have bought him/her a present. Write a letter and say- What is the present? - Why did you choose it? - Arrange a visit to pass on the present and see the baby. v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
171 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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