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you have seen an advertisment in an australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and loo after their six year old child. write a letter to the parents. in your letterexplain why you lie the job, give details why you be would be a su v. 2

Dear sir or madam, I am writing in express to the advert in the ' ' New Aspirants' ' magazine a couple of weeks ago. In regards to need of caretaker for a toddler. Let me elaborate in details. Basically, I am jessica a 26-year-old graduated arts student. I was enthusiastic upon reading, as all the requirements you mentioned were meeting my credentials. Firstly, i had done a nanny course from a prestigious institution. Overall, I do have hands on experience as well as insight depth information of partaking too. So, this was my main concern to prefer this occupation of serving for your child. Seconadaly, I have an indispensable qualities of kindness, gracious nature and have a compassionate feelings for juveniles as this is my work and human nature too. Moreover, I have completed my study also due to this i was in thought of getting a job opportunity in a native country for my career advancement. This will be my first job so unlike other unaffordable caretakers i would not demand a high pay rate for my service. Although, i had grab this opportunity of handling and getting used of children during my training process and was paid enough also for extra hours. Lastly, while my leisure time i would love to explore my course through libraries and online study in the new country. I shall look forward to your favorable response. yours sincerely, jessica.

IELTS letter you have seen an advertisment in an australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and loo after their six year old child. write a letter to the parents. in your letterexplain why you lie the job, give details why you be would be a su v.2

Dear sir or madam, I am writing in express to the advert in the ' ' New
Aspirants&
#039; ' magazine a couple of weeks ago.
In regards to
need of caretaker for a toddler.
Let
me elaborate in
details
.
Basically
, I am
jessica
a 26-year-
old
graduated
arts
student. I was enthusiastic upon reading, as all the requirements you mentioned were meeting my credentials.
Firstly
,
i
had done a nanny course from a prestigious institution.
Overall
, I do have hands on experience
as well
as insight depth information of partaking too.
So
, this was my main concern to prefer this occupation of serving for your child.
Seconadaly
, I have an indispensable
qualities
of kindness, gracious nature and have a compassionate
feelings
for juveniles as this is my work and human nature too.
Moreover
, I have completed my study
also
due to this
i
was in
thought
of getting a job opportunity in a native country for my career advancement. This will be my
first
job
so
unlike other unaffordable caretakers
i
would not demand a high pay rate for my service. Although,
i
had grab this opportunity of handling and getting
used
of children during my training process and
was paid
enough
also
for extra hours.
Lastly
, while my leisure time
i
would
love
to explore my course through libraries and online study in the new country. I shall look forward to your favorable response.
yours
sincerely
,
jessica
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Mistakes
Letter
8 paragraphs
237 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resources: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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