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25/10/2017You have been to a business meeting at another company and saw a piece of equipment which can be useful for your company too. Write a letter to your manager about the following: Describe the piece of equipment you have seenWhy having the same equ v.2

25/10/2017You have been to a business meeting at another company and saw a piece of equipment which can be useful for your company too. Write a letter to your manager about the following: Describe the piece of equipment you have seenWhy having the same equ v. 2
Dear Mr. Smith, I am writing to inform you the recent meeting was a success. While visiting our partners, I noticed an interesting device that may be useful for our company. It is a usb-transmitter that turns a regular laser printer into a wi-fi one. The item is relatively small and has a size of a matchbox; moreover, it is energy efficient and consumes less electricity than a cell-phone. The transmitter requires no maintenance and begins work automatically after the equipment is plugged into a usb port of a printer. From a conversation with my counterpart in the host company, I learned they have been exploiting this miraculous technology for a couple of years by now. That allowed them to reduce the number of printers used from one hundred and twenty to sixty because each one may be easily used by several employees. Consequently, the firm has approximately saved up to fifty thousand dollars on maintenance. This item is being produced by a small local firm and it is literally impossible to buy the device outside the country. Admittedly, the price on them is reasonable and one piece costs about 25 dollars. If you see the idea of buying several such items as worthy, I can quickly purchase the needed number. I also may take the contacts of the company that sells those devices to phone them later if we decide to purchase more of the transmitters. I am waiting for your prompt response, Sincerely yours, Eugene Dubinchuk.
Dear Mr. Smith,

I am writing to inform you the recent meeting was a success. While visiting our partners, I noticed an interesting device that may be useful for our
company
.

It is
a
usb-transmitter
that turns a regular laser printer into a
wi-fi
one. The item is
relatively
small
and has a size of a matchbox;
moreover
, it is energy efficient and consumes less electricity than a cell-phone. The transmitter requires no maintenance and
begins
work
automatically
after the equipment
is plugged
into
a
usb
port of a printer.

From a conversation with my counterpart in the host
company
, I learned they have been exploiting this miraculous technology for a couple of years by
now
. That
allowed
them to
reduce
the number of printers
used
from one hundred and twenty to sixty
because
each one may be
easily
used
by several employees.
Consequently
, the firm has approximately saved up to fifty thousand dollars on maintenance.

This item is
being produced
by a
small
local firm and it is
literally
impossible to
buy
the device outside the country.
Admittedly
, the price on them is reasonable and one piece costs about 25 dollars. If you
see
the
idea
of buying several such items as worthy, I can
quickly
purchase
the needed number. I
also
may take the contacts of the
company
that sells those devices to phone them later if we decide to
purchase
more of the transmitters.

I am waiting for your prompt response,

Sincerely
yours,

Eugene
Dubinchuk
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS letter 25/10/2017You have been to a business meeting at another company and saw a piece of equipment which can be useful for your company too. Write a letter to your manager about the following: Describe the piece of equipment you have seenWhy having the same equ v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
248 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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