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10/10/2017You recently saw an advertisement about helpers for children summer holiday camp. Write a letter to camp organizers and say: – Describe the areas where you can help. – Give the time period you are available. – Ask some questions about the cam v.1

10/10/2017You recently saw an advertisement about helpers for children summer holiday camp. Write a letter to camp organizers and say: – Describe the areas where you can help. – Give the time period you are available. – Ask some questions about the cam v. 1
Dear Sir or Madame, I have recently read an ad in a local newspaper that states help is needed in a summer holiday camp. I am a university student who pursues a master degree in psychology. Although my major field of interest is consultancy, I hope my person may be useful in your camp. For instance, I can work with the staff to help them to resolve their psychological issues and not to project those personal matters on children. Moreover, studying conflictology for two years could be useful as well. If there are any disputes or cases of violence among educators or progeny, I can help to solve them quickly and peacefully. Unfortunately, I have to prepare to incoming examination but I will be available from first July to fifteenth August 2017. Five hours per weekday and two or three hours per weekend can be devoted to working in the camp. Ideally, I’d prefer to start my working day at 8: 00 because my evenings are spent on preparation for the next semester. I have some questions and hopefully, you don’t mind answering them. Primarily, how many children visit the camp every day and how many teachers and educators are employed. Furthermore, your prospect on the way how pupils should spend their leisure time is a very interesting question as well. If my proposal is interesting for your institution, please contact me via e-mail. Sincerely yours, Eugene Dubinchuk.
Dear Sir or Madame,

I have recently read an ad in a local newspaper that states
help
is needed
in a summer holiday camp. I am a university student who pursues a master degree in psychology. Although my major field of interest is consultancy, I hope my person may be useful in your camp.
For instance
, I can work with the staff to
help
them to resolve their psychological issues and not to project those personal matters on children.
Moreover
, studying
conflictology
for two years could be useful
as well
. If there are any disputes or cases of violence among educators or progeny, I can
help
to solve them
quickly
and
peacefully
.

Unfortunately, I
have to
prepare to incoming examination
but
I will be available from
first
July to fifteenth August 2017. Five hours per weekday and two or three hours per weekend can
be devoted
to working in the camp.
Ideally
, I’d prefer to
start
my working day at 8: 00
because
my evenings
are spent
on preparation for the
next
semester.

I have
some
questions and
hopefully
, you don’t mind answering them.
Primarily
, how
many
children visit the camp every day and how
many
teachers and educators
are employed
.
Furthermore
, your prospect on the way how pupils should spend their leisure time is a
very
interesting question
as well
.

If my proposal is interesting for your institution,
please
contact me via e-mail.

Sincerely
yours,

Eugene
Dubinchuk
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter 10/10/2017You recently saw an advertisement about helpers for children summer holiday camp. Write a letter to camp organizers and say: – Describe the areas where you can help. – Give the time period you are available. – Ask some questions about the cam v. 1

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
238 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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