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02. 10. 2017 You are unhappy about a plat to make your local airport bigger and increase the number of flights. You live near the airport. Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter. Explain where you liveDescribe the problemGive reasons why you d v.1

02. 10. 2017 You are unhappy about a plat to make your local airport bigger and increase the number of flights. You live near the airport. Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter. Explain where you liveDescribe the problemGive reasons why you d v. 1
Dear Sir or Madame, I am writing to share my concerns about the announced plans to increase usage of our airport. I live in the small town that hosts the discussed airport. My house is situated on a crossroads of West and South streets nearby a local hospital in a couple of kilometers from the main airport building. Firstly, the airport is located in the heart of our town and local infrastructure was not designed to handle the volume of cargo and the number of passengers that will have been arriving after the reconstruction will be finished. Secondly, aircrafts that land in the airport create a considerable noise that distress sleep of small children and elderly who live near the runway. Increasing in the number of flights accepted will undoubtedly worsen the current situation. In other words, this development will unquestionably have a disadvantageous influence on the quality of life of local dwellers whose everyday traveling will be turned into a nightmare due to traffic jams. Moreover, if the plans were implemented, the taking off and landing jets would not ruin well-being of the town inhabitants of all ages but also have a detrimental effect on local wildlife that is well-known for its richness. I hope that my complaint will be taken into account by the authorities. Sincerely yours, Eugene Dubinchuk.
Dear Sir or Madame,

I am writing to share my concerns about the announced plans to increase usage of our airport.

I
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live
in the
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small
town that hosts the discussed
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airport
. My
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house
is situated
on a crossroads of West and South streets nearby a
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local
hospital in a couple of kilometers from the main
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
airport
building.

Firstly
, the
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airport
is located
in the heart of our town and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
infrastructure was not designed to handle the volume of cargo and the number of passengers that will have been arriving after the reconstruction will
be finished
.
Secondly
,
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aircrafts
that land in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
airport
create a considerable noise that distress sleep of
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small
children and elderly who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
near the runway. Increasing in the number of flights
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accepted
will
undoubtedly
worsen the
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current
situation.

In other words
, this development will
unquestionably
have a disadvantageous influence on the quality of life of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
dwellers whose everyday traveling will
be turned
into a nightmare due to traffic jams.
Moreover
, if the plans
were implemented
, the taking off and landing jets would not ruin well-being of the town inhabitants of all ages
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
have a detrimental effect on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
wildlife
that is
well-known for its richness.

I hope that my complaint will
be taken
into account by the authorities.

Sincerely
yours,

Eugene
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Dubinchuk
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10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter 02. 10. 2017 You are unhappy about a plat to make your local airport bigger and increase the number of flights. You live near the airport. Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter. Explain where you liveDescribe the problemGive reasons why you d v. 1

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
221 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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