Dear Sarah,
I am writing to inform you I will not be able to meet you at the train station. However, I have made all arrangements to make you arrival convenient. Before I left the home, I had given a set of keys from the house to my neighbor Mrs. Smith. You may take the keys from her. She usually spends all day in her garden; so, you’d better phone her otherwise she will not hear you. Her cell phone number is +19008008989. She will give you three keys, the biggest one is used to open the entrance door. The lock in this door has a secret and to open it you will need to turn it once on the left and then three times on the right.
There are two ways to get to my place. Firstly, you can use public transport. The closest bus stop to the train station is located near the main entrance. You should take a bus number four and then get off at the fifth stop. When you left the coach, you should turn around and my house will be right in front of you. Another way to get to the destination is to take a taxi cab but this ride may cost you a small fortune.
I will be home at 10: 00 pm. I think that by the time I arrive you will have become really hungry because my fridge is completely empty. So, on my way home, I will purchase a big pizza and some wine; After we have a decent dinner, we can watch your favorite movie on DVD if you want.
See you soon.
Your brother Eugene. 
Dear Sarah,
I am writing to inform you I will not be able to  
meet
 you at the train station.  
However
, I have made all arrangements to  
make
 you arrival convenient.  
Before
 I  
left
 the home, I had  
given
 a set of keys from the  
house
 to my neighbor Mrs. Smith. You may take the keys from her. She  
usually
 spends all day in her garden;  
so
, you’d better phone her  
otherwise
 she will not hear you. Her cell phone number is +19008008989. She will give you three keys, the biggest one is  
used
 to open the entrance door. The lock in this door has a secret and to open it you will need to turn it once on the  
left
 and then three times on the right.
There are two ways to  
get
 to my place.  
Firstly
, you can  
use
 public transport. The closest bus  
stop
 to the train station  
is located
 near the main entrance. You should take a bus number four and then  
get
 off at the fifth  
stop
. When you  
left
 the coach, you should turn around and my  
house
 will be right in front of you. Another way to  
get
 to the destination is to take a taxi cab  
but
 this ride may cost you a  
small
 fortune.
I will be home at 10: 00 pm. I  
think
 that by the time I arrive you will have become  
really hungry
  because
 my fridge is completely empty.  
So
, on my way home, I will  
purchase
 a  
big
 pizza and  
some
 wine; After we have a decent dinner, we can  
watch
 your favorite movie on DVD if you want. 
See
 you  
soon
.
Your brother Eugene. 
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