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29. 09. 2017 You have recently visited a tourist attraction and were very pleased by the help given to you by the staff. Write a letter to the staff manager and say– Give details of your visit. – Describe how the staff helped you. – What do you want the v.2

29. 09. 2017 You have recently visited a tourist attraction and were very pleased by the help given to you by the staff. Write a letter to the staff manager and say– Give details of your visit. – Describe how the staff helped you. – What do you want the v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my happiness with the service provided by your employees. I am a businessman and a week ago I visited the capital of Russia because of some business issues. When the deal had been done, I still had a day to spend in your city, so I followed a piece of advice and visited your zoo. The experience was incredible and joyful due to professionalism and personal qualities of some members of your staff. Primarily, I do not speak or read in Russian and I had a hard time to understand the information about animals and their habitat that was written on tablets near cages and cells with the displayed creatures. A janitor who was cleaning a cage noticed my struggle and helped me by translating the info. Moreover, it was the time of feeding and another employee whose duty is to feed animals allowed me to give some fruits and vegetables to such marvelous creatures as zebras, giraffes and even elephants. I would like that the benevolent conduct of those workers become known to others, perhaps, they may be praised as examples of ideal employees who adore their work and like to help visitors. In addition, if it is possible to reward them with promotion or a pay rise, it would be ideal. Sincerely yours, Eugene Dubinchuk
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my happiness with the service provided by your employees.

I am a businessman and a week ago I visited the capital of Russia
because
of
some
business issues. When the deal had
been done
, I
still
had a day to spend in your city,
so
I followed a piece of advice and visited your zoo. The experience was incredible and joyful due to professionalism and personal qualities of
some
members of your staff.

Primarily
, I do not speak or read in Russian and I had a
hard
time to understand the information about animals and their habitat that
was written
on tablets near cages and cells with the displayed creatures. A janitor who was cleaning a cage noticed my struggle and
helped
me by translating the info.
Moreover
, it was the time of feeding and another employee whose duty is to feed animals
allowed
me to give
some
fruits and vegetables to such marvelous creatures as zebras, giraffes and even elephants.

I would like that the benevolent conduct of those workers become known to others, perhaps, they may
be praised
as examples of ideal employees who adore their work and like to
help
visitors.
In addition
, if it is possible to reward them with promotion or a pay rise, it would be ideal.

Sincerely
yours,

Eugene
Dubinchuk
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS letter 29. 09. 2017 You have recently visited a tourist attraction and were very pleased by the help given to you by the staff. Write a letter to the staff manager and say– Give details of your visit. – Describe how the staff helped you. – What do you want the v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
225 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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