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01/10/2017 You recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You phoned the shop but no action was taken. Write a letter to the shop manager. In your letter. Describe the problem with the equipmentExplain what happened when you v.2

01/10/2017 You recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You phoned the shop but no action was taken. Write a letter to the shop manager. In your letter. Describe the problem with the equipmentExplain what happened when you v. 2
Dear Sir or Madame, I am writing to complain about the low quality of your customer service. One week ago I purchased a novel microwave oven in your store. The equipment was delivered on time and the package had no signs of damage; however, when I tried to use it, the oven won’t work. I immediately phoned the shop. My phone call was answered by a representative of your firm who initially implied that I did not use the equipment properly and that, perhaps, reading manual may help. After I described in details the problem and my actions, he agreed that the oven is out of order and promised to send a specialist in microwaves who has never shown up. Now, I demand that this malfunctioning piece of equipment was replaced by a brand new one. The new oven ought to be delivered within a week. If my requirements are not met, I will request a full refund as well as a complaint on you will be written. I am waiting for your prompt response, Sincerely yours, Eugene Dubinchuk.
Dear Sir or Madame,

I am writing to complain about the low quality of your customer service.

One week ago I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchased
a novel microwave
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
oven
in your store. The equipment
was delivered
on time and the package had no signs of damage;
however
, when I tried to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
it, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
oven
won’t work. I immediately phoned the shop.

My phone call
was answered
by a representative of your firm who
initially
implied that I did not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
the equipment
properly
and that, perhaps, reading manual may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
. After I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
described
in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
the problem and my actions, he
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agreed
that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
oven
is out of order and promised to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
a specialist in microwaves who
Did you mean "have", "haven"? Alternatively, check whether the singular of 'microwaves' should be used.
has
never shown up.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
, I demand that this malfunctioning piece of equipment
was replaced
by a
'brand new' seems to be a compound adjective in front of a noun. Use a hyphen: "brand-new".
brand new
one. The new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
oven
ought to
be delivered
within a week. If my requirements are not met, I will request a full refund
as well
as a complaint on you will
be written
.

I am waiting for your prompt response,

Sincerely
yours,

Eugene
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Dubinchuk
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4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS letter 01/10/2017 You recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You phoned the shop but no action was taken. Write a letter to the shop manager. In your letter. Describe the problem with the equipmentExplain what happened when you v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
179 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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