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In many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree? v.7

In many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. v. 7
Several countries banned smoking in common places, however people who like to smoke can use the smoking zone area. I completely agree with this statement. Firstly, this essay will discuss about the importance of banning smoke in public places. Secondly, this essay will discuss why people should use private places to smoke? Smokers knew smoking is injurious to health, even in India it is mandated to use this tag in all the cigarette covers and boxers still sales rate is unstoppable. Though government increased the tax rate for all tobacco products however cigars are one of the major revenue generation in today’s market. One of the least steps taken by the government to control smoking habit by prohibiting in public places. To prove that, Anna University had done many surveys on smoking and the results show that 80% people suffering from cancer due to usage of tobacco substances, also young persons from school and colleges are more addicted in last decade. Globally, it is accepted that tobacco is not good to health. Nonsmokers are affected more than regular smokers because of inhaling the smoke by others. For instance, my neighbor who is an active smoker, his kid suffered from cough and other medical issues because of inhalation. By using the separate places for smoking, common people will not suffer from smoke also children will not inspire to follow their elders’ bad habits. Recently local NGO released documentary film on effects of smoking and essential of using smoking zone which brought a big difference among tobacco users, this video should be promoted internationally for larger audience. To conclude, most of the countries have taken step to stop smoking in public places is a welcoming decision which will bring goodness. Also, it is individual responsibility to smoke in the right area without interrupting the public.
Several countries banned
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smoking
in common
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places
,
however
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people
who like to
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smoke
can
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use
the
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smoking
zone area. I completely
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agree
with this statement.
Firstly
, this essay will
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discuss about the
importance of banning
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smoke
in
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public
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places
.
Secondly
, this essay will discuss why
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people
should
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use
private
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places
to smoke?

Smokers knew
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smoking
is injurious to health, even in India it
is mandated
to
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use
this tag in all the cigarette covers and boxers
still
sales rate is unstoppable. Though
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government
increased the tax rate for all
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tobacco
products
however
cigars are one of the major revenue generation in
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today
’s market. One of the least steps taken by the
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government
to control
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smoking
habit by prohibiting in
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public
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places
. To prove that, Anna University had done
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many
surveys on
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smoking
and the results
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show
that 80%
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people
suffering from cancer due to usage of
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tobacco
substances,
also
young persons from school and colleges are more addicted in last decade.

Globally, it is
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accepted
that
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tobacco
is not
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good
to health. Nonsmokers are
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affected
more than regular smokers
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because
of inhaling the
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smoke
by others.
For instance
, my neighbor who is an active smoker, his kid suffered from cough and other medical issues
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because
of inhalation. By using the separate
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places
for
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smoking
, common
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people
will not suffer from
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smoke
also
children will not inspire to follow their elders’
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bad
habits. Recently local NGO released documentary film on effects of
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smoking
and essential of using
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smoking
zone which brought a
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big
difference among
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tobacco
users, this video should
be promoted
internationally
for larger audience.

To conclude
, most of the countries have taken step to
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stop
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smoking
in
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public
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places
is a welcoming decision which will bring goodness.
Also
, it is individual responsibility to
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smoke
in the right area without interrupting the
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public
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS letter In many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. v. 7

Letter
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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