Dear Mr. Smith
I work as an accountant in your firm and from a recent e-mail, I learned about closing the cafeteria due to its unpopularity. I am writing in a hope that the management may rethink the decision. In fact, the staff need have the cafe because only a small number of employees take home-made meals with them and the rest of the staff do not eat anything while being in the workplace. This situation has an adverse effect on their health and at least half of colleagues have issues with their stomachs.
It appears people avoid the local cafeteria because the meals served are tasteless at best and look terrible. Moreover, a large proportion of personnel are vegetarians who cannot eat meat, eggs and fish; thus, the absence of wholesome, healthy vegetarian options deters them from visiting the café.
The troublesome situation may be addressed if the place has a new menu with vegetables, fruits and dairy products such as fatless yogurts. Hiring new staff for the kitchen of the café will have a benevolent influence on the quality of food and constant monitoring of cooked meals will prevent the repetition of the problem.
Sincerely yours,
Eugene Dubinchuk.
Dear Mr. Smith
I work as an accountant in your firm and from a recent e-mail, I learned about closing the cafeteria due to its unpopularity. I am writing in a hope that the management may rethink the decision. In fact, the staff need have the
cafe
because
only
a
small
number of employees take home-made meals with them and the rest of the staff do not eat anything while being in the workplace. This situation has an adverse effect on their health and at least half of colleagues have issues with their stomachs.
It appears
people
avoid the local cafeteria
because
the meals served are tasteless at best and look terrible.
Moreover
, a large proportion of personnel are vegetarians who cannot eat meat, eggs and fish;
thus
, the absence of wholesome, healthy vegetarian options deters them from visiting the café.
The troublesome situation may
be addressed
if the place has a new menu with vegetables, fruits and dairy products such as
fatless
yogurts. Hiring new staff for the kitchen of the café will have a benevolent influence on the quality of food and constant monitoring of cooked meals will
prevent
the repetition of the problem.
Sincerely
yours,
Eugene
Dubinchuk
.
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