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The company you work for has decided to close the cafeteria as staff are not using it much. You are unhappy about it. Write a letter to the supervisor / director (someone in authority)-Asking not to close it-Inform what feel is the cause of staff not usin v.1

The company you work for has decided to close the cafeteria as staff are not using it much. You are unhappy about it. Write a letter to the supervisor / director (someone in authority)-Asking not to close it-Inform what feel is the cause of staff not usin v. 1
Dear Sir or Madam, I learnt of management' s decision to close down the staff canteen due to low patronage and I am writing to express my unhappiness with the plan. If shutdown, staff will have to go out, to find places to eat and the closest eatery around is about thirty minutes drive from the office. This will cause some employees to spend more than the normal one hour given for lunch breaks. Also, the cafeteria was created to check the quality of food that staff eat, after it was reported by our medical team, that some staff don' t eat healthy. Therefore, if closed, there will be no way for management to measure these factors. In view of these, I would ask that we do not close the canteen. The major cause of the low patronage by our employees is mainly the high cost of meals at the canteen. While one can eat for a thousand Naira in any standard eatery in the city, our cafeteria charges one thousand five hundred Naira for a standard meal. Most personnel argue that with that amount, they can cook what will last them for three days at home. To boost sales, I suggest that the price of meals are lowered to the rate that the other staff canteens around charge. I also suggest that the waiters be retrained on how to deal with customers. Many of our employees have complained on how the food servers talk to them each time they raise a concern in the eatery. I look forward to seeing these recommendations implemented. It will be a win-win for all. Yours faithfully, Okoronkwo Alfred Chinedu.
Dear Sir or Madam,

I
learnt
of
management&
#039; s decision to close down the
staff
canteen due to low
patronage and
I am writing to express my unhappiness with the plan.

If shutdown,
staff
will
have to
go out, to find places to
eat
and the closest eatery around is about thirty minutes drive from the office. This will cause
some
employees to spend more than the normal
one hour
given
for lunch breaks.
Also
, the cafeteria
was created
to
check
the quality of food that
staff
eat
, after it
was reported
by our medical team, that
some
staff
don&
#039; t
eat
healthy.
Therefore
, if closed, there will be no way for management to measure these factors. In view of these, I would ask that we do not close the canteen.

The major cause of the low patronage by our employees is
mainly
the high cost of meals at the canteen. While one can
eat
for a thousand
Naira
in any standard eatery in the city, our cafeteria charges one thousand five hundred
Naira
for a standard meal. Most personnel argue that with that amount, they can cook what will last them for three days at home.

To boost sales, I suggest that the price of meals
are lowered
to the rate that the other
staff
canteens around charge. I
also
suggest that the waiters
be retrained
on how to deal with customers.
Many
of our employees have complained on how the food servers talk to them each time they raise a concern in the eatery.

I look forward to seeing these recommendations implemented. It will be a win-win for all.

Yours
faithfully
,

Okoronkwo
Alfred
Chinedu
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS letter The company you work for has decided to close the cafeteria as staff are not using it much. You are unhappy about it. Write a letter to the supervisor / director (someone in authority)-Asking not to close it-Inform what feel is the cause of staff not usin v. 1

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
276 words
6.0
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