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Zoos are inhumane and pointless. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Zoos are inhumane and pointless. v. 1
Love them or loathe them, zoos have been part of the cityscape for over 150 years. Recently, however, many have questioned their value and the quality of care provided to the animals. Personally, I feel that zoos are cruel, pointless and ought to be phased out. Although many zoos have made great improvements over the years, there can be no doubt that the captive animals suffer. Polar bears, for instance, travel across vast distances of ice daily and yet, in some tropical regions, they are kept in small pens with only a tiny pool for relief. Not only are the enclosures usually far too small, but the climate and conditions are often completely unsuitable. In addition to this discomfort, zoo animals can suffer stress as a result of being kept with unfamiliar and unrelated cage-mates, not to mention the crowds of noisy visitors. In terms of conservation, while zoos can assist in the preservation of endangered species, this effort is ultimately futile. The Sumatran tiger, for example, has been successfully bred in captivity, however, having been reared by humans, the captive population has lost its natural instinct to hunt, avoid humans, and raise its young. It would therefore be impossible to re-introduce these creatures into the wild. As well as this loss of instinct, there is also the loss of habitat to consider. Urban sprawl, industrial noise, farming and logging all contribute to the destruction of habitat, meaning that even if a captive bred population of pandas or tigers were ready for release, there is, in fact, nowhere left for them to go. In conclusion, zoos may be able to keep animals alive, but the quality of this life is poor and the animals’ future prospects are bleak. Efforts should instead be made to preserve wilderness areas to ensure the long-term survival of species
Love
them or loathe them, zoos have been part of the cityscape for over 150 years. Recently,
however
,
many
have questioned their value and the quality of care provided to the
animals
.
Personally
, I feel that zoos are cruel, pointless and ought to
be phased
out.

Although
many
zoos have made great improvements over the years, there can be no doubt that the captive
animals
suffer. Polar bears,
for instance
, travel across vast distances of ice daily and
yet
, in
some
tropical regions, they are
kept
in
small
pens with
only
a tiny pool for relief. Not
only
are the enclosures
usually
far too
small
,
but
the climate and conditions are
often
completely unsuitable.
In addition
to this discomfort, zoo
animals
can suffer
stress
as a result
of being
kept
with unfamiliar and unrelated cage-mates, not to mention the crowds of noisy visitors.

In terms of conservation, while zoos can assist in the preservation of endangered species, this effort is
ultimately
futile. The Sumatran tiger,
for example
, has been
successfully
bred in captivity,
however
, having
been reared
by humans, the captive population has lost its natural instinct to hunt, avoid humans, and raise its young. It would
therefore
be impossible to re-introduce these creatures into the wild.
As well
as this loss of instinct, there is
also
the loss of habitat to consider. Urban sprawl, industrial noise, farming and logging all contribute to the destruction of habitat, meaning that even if a captive bred population of pandas or tigers were ready for release, there is, in fact, nowhere
left
for them to go.

In conclusion
, zoos may be able to
keep
animals
alive,
but
the quality of this life is poor and the
animals’
future prospects are bleak. Efforts should
instead
be made
to preserve wilderness areas to ensure the long-term survival of
species
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Zoos are inhumane and pointless. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
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