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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective? v.35

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 35
IN THIS MODERN ERA, WE CAN FOUND A VEHICLE IN EVERY HOUSE AND PEOPLE USE THEM RATHER THAN USING PUBLIC TRANSPORT BECAUSE OF THE COMMODITY. HOWEVER, THIS IS CREATING SOME NEGATIVE EFFECTS SUCH AS TRAFFIC JAMS ON ROAD AND POLLUTING AREAS. FROM MY POINT OF VIEW, GROWING THE RATE OF PETROL IS NOT THE BEST SOLUTION BECAUSE WEALTHY PEOPLE CAN AFFORD THE FUEL AND CONSUME CARS. THERE ARE OTHER WAYS TO SOLVE THIS. TO BEGIN WITH, IF THE AMOUNT FOR PETROL RISE THEN THERE COULD BE NO PROBLEM FOR RICH SOCIETIES. IN OTHR WORDS, MOSTLY WEALTHY PEOPLE HAVE LOTS OF VEHICLE IN THEIR HOME THAT THEY USE THEM FOR LONG AS WELL AS SHORT DISTANCES. THEY CAN EASILY PAY FOR DIESEL BECAUSE THEY ALREADY HAVE A BIG AMOUNT OF MONEY, THUS, INCREASING PRICE OF FUEL CANNOT SOLVE PROBLEMS OF TRAFFIC JAMS AND POLLUTION. I THINK, THERE ARE MORE OTHER EFFECTIVE IDEAS TO TACKLE WITH THESE CASUALTIES. FIRSTLY, GOVERNMENT CAN HELP FOR TRAFFIS JAMS. THEY CAN MAKE SOME RULES FOR USING TRANSPORT. TO BE CLEAR, IF A PERSON MAKE THE CONSUME OF CAR OR ANY OTHER VEHICLE FOR HORT DISTANCES, THE POLICE SHOULD GIVE A FINE BECAUSE THEY CAN ALSO USE OTHER WAYS TO REACH THEIR SMALL DESTINATIONS. FOR EXAMPLE, THEY CAN GO BY BICYCLES OR BY FOOT. MEANWHILE, THE POLLUTION IS NOT ONLY CAUSED BY FUMES EMITTED BY THE CARS. THEY ARE ALSO CREATED BY OTHER THINGS LIKE, RUBBISH WE THROW AND DIRTY WATER. I BELIVE THAT, THIS TYPE OF PROBLEMS COULD BE SOLVE IF ALL INDIVIDUAL TAKE THEIR RESPONSIBILITIES. THEY COULD RECYCLE THINKS INSTEAD OF WASTING IT AT ONCE. TO SUMMARIZE, PROBLEMS LIKE TRANSPORT JAMS AND POLLUTION CANNOT BE TACKLED KY RISING AMOUNT FOR PETROLS. WHILE, USING LESS VEHICLES FOR SHOR DISTANCES CAN HELP LESS TRANSPORTATION JAMS AND IF GOVERNMENT AND EVERY INDIVIDUAL PARTICIPATE TOGETHER TO SOLVE THIS PROBLEM WHICH I THINK IS THE BEST OPTION.
IN THIS MODERN ERA, WE CAN
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FOUND
A
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VEHICLE
IN EVERY
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HOUSE
AND
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PEOPLE
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USE
THEM
RATHER
THAN USING PUBLIC TRANSPORT
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BECAUSE
OF THE COMMODITY.
HOWEVER
, THIS IS CREATING
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SOME
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NEGATIVE
EFFECTS SUCH AS TRAFFIC JAMS ON ROAD AND POLLUTING AREAS. FROM MY POINT OF VIEW, GROWING THE RATE OF PETROL IS NOT THE BEST SOLUTION
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BECAUSE
WEALTHY
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PEOPLE
CAN AFFORD THE FUEL AND CONSUME CARS. THERE ARE
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OTHER
WAYS TO
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SOLVE
THIS.

TO
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BEGIN
WITH, IF THE AMOUNT FOR PETROL RISE THEN THERE COULD BE NO
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PROBLEM
FOR RICH SOCIETIES. IN
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OTHR
WORDS,
MOSTLY
WEALTHY
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PEOPLE
HAVE LOTS OF
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VEHICLE
IN THEIR HOME THAT THEY
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USE
THEM FOR LONG
AS WELL
AS SHORT DISTANCES. THEY CAN
EASILY
PAY FOR DIESEL
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BECAUSE
THEY ALREADY HAVE A
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BIG
AMOUNT OF MONEY,
THUS
, INCREASING PRICE OF FUEL CANNOT
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SOLVE
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PROBLEMS
OF TRAFFIC JAMS AND POLLUTION. I
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THINK
, THERE ARE MORE
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OTHER
EFFECTIVE
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IDEAS
TO TACKLE WITH THESE CASUALTIES.

FIRSTLY
,
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GOVERNMENT
CAN
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HELP
FOR
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TRAFFIS
JAMS. THEY CAN
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MAKE
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SOME
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RULES
FOR USING TRANSPORT. TO BE
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CLEAR
, IF A PERSON
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MAKE
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THE CONSUME
OF CAR OR ANY
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OTHER
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VEHICLE
FOR
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HORT
DISTANCES, THE POLICE SHOULD GIVE A FINE
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BECAUSE
THEY CAN
ALSO
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USE
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OTHER
WAYS TO REACH THEIR
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SMALL
DESTINATIONS.
FOR EXAMPLE
, THEY CAN GO BY BICYCLES OR BY FOOT. MEANWHILE, THE POLLUTION IS NOT
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ONLY
CAUSED BY FUMES EMITTED BY THE CARS. THEY ARE
ALSO
CREATED BY
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OTHER
THINGS LIKE, RUBBISH WE THROW AND DIRTY WATER.
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I BELIVE
THAT, THIS TYPE OF
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PROBLEMS
COULD BE
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SOLVE
IF ALL INDIVIDUAL TAKE THEIR RESPONSIBILITIES. THEY COULD RECYCLE
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THINKS
INSTEAD
OF WASTING IT AT ONCE.

TO SUMMARIZE
,
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PROBLEMS
LIKE TRANSPORT JAMS AND POLLUTION CANNOT
BE TACKLED
KY RISING AMOUNT FOR
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PETROLS
. WHILE, USING
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LESS
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VEHICLES
FOR
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SHOR
DISTANCES CAN
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HELP
LESS TRANSPORTATION JAMS AND IF
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GOVERNMENT
AND EVERY INDIVIDUAL PARTICIPATE TOGETHER TO
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SOLVE
THIS
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PROBLEM
WHICH I
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THINK
IS THE BEST OPTION.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 35

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
317 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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