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You’re interested in a music course that you saw on an advertise. Write a letter to the club. In your letter, you should: explain why you’re interestedrequest more information about the coursetalk about your past experiences. v.1

You’re interested in a music course that you saw on an advertise. Write a letter to the club. In your letter, you should: explain why you’re interestedrequest more information about the coursetalk about your past experiences. v. 1
While teachers used to teach all aspects of life to students after starting their school course, the recent decades have seen a rise in the amount of time parents can spend with their children. It seems to reinforce child skills, school teachers cannot play a role as efficiently as parents. Youngsters have been affected by teachers since their instruction begins. The child’s potential will be ameliorated by doing various courses in schools. Different teachers will work on motley sides of student abilities. To illustrate, psychology is one of the most crucial subjects which teachers try to beef-up this quality of the young. Furthermore, teachers have to turn-round children physically. Child’s social skills must be considered by teachers who endeavour to improve them. Not only do these activities important in their schools, but they are extremely significant in their future social life. Most individuals and I reckon parents have much more impressive than teachers for children since they go to school. Parents ought to spend a large amount of time to buttress child qualities. Children spend twofold time they stay with their teachers, with their parents. Children compassion and sentiments must be ameliorated by parents brilliantly activities. Students will have numerous bereft on their learning course. Parents have to cover their institution learning dearths which solving them are exceedingly dominant in children’s future. Child skills amplification from whole facets is prominent in their lives. To sum up, most individuals accept that after a youngster begins instruction, their guardians will have more impact than their instructors.
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course, the recent decades have
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seen
a rise in the amount of time
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parents
can spend with their
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children
. It seems to reinforce
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child
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skills
,
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school
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teachers
cannot play a role as
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as parents.

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affected
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teachers
since their instruction
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begins
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child’s
potential will
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by doing various courses in
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schools
.
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Different
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teachers
will work on motley sides of student abilities. To illustrate, psychology is one of the most crucial subjects which
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teachers
try to beef-up this quality of the young.
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teachers
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have to
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children
physically
.
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Child’s
social
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skills
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do these activities
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important
in their
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schools
,
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they are
extremely
significant in their future social life.

Most individuals and I reckon
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parents
have much more impressive than
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teachers
for
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children
since they go to
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school
.
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Parents
ought to spend a large amount of time to buttress
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child
qualities.
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Children
spend twofold time they stay with their
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teachers
, with their
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parents
.
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Children
compassion and sentiments
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must
be ameliorated
by
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parents
brilliantly
activities. Students will have numerous bereft on their learning course.
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Parents
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have to
cover their institution learning dearths which solving them are
exceedingly
dominant in
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children’s
future.
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Child
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skills
amplification from whole facets is prominent in their
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lives
.

To sum up, most individuals accept that after a youngster
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begins
instruction, their guardians will have more impact than their instructors.
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IELTS essay You’re interested in a music course that you saw on an advertise. Write a letter to the club. In your letter, you should: explain why you’re interestedrequest more information about the coursetalk about your past experiences. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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