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You are interested in applying for a scholarship program to study at a foreign university Write a letter to inquire about about a course In your letter explain which course you are interested in tell what you know about the university explain why you shou v.1

You are interested in applying for a scholarship program to study at a foreign university Write a letter to inquire about about a course In your letter explain which course you are interested in tell what you know about the university explain why you shou v. 1
Whether a single-sex or a uni-sex university is more advantageous and yields better results is open for debate. Single-sex schools are preferred by many since they believe that it ensures a better environment for education while the proponents of coeducation argue that boys and girls should be taught together for a healthy competition and better mutual understanding. Personally, I prefer the single-sex institute method. The advocates of the mixed-education system often point out that when boys and girls study in the same institution, they grow a mutual understanding. As a result, it will ensure a wholesome work environment in the future. Moreover, this education system encourages a healthy competitive and helps students excel not only in their studies but also in other important areas. For instance, when boys and girls are assigned to a project, they tend to learn how to work together. Reversely, they often compete to show their supremacy and thus excel in education and learning. But this is not the whole picture. As a female, and as a student in both coeducational and separate schools, I must outline that I felt more comfortable being with girls than boys. In a perfect world, the mixed-sex schools may produce far-reaching benefits, but not in a world where we are often shattered by the harsh reality. Single-sex schools have less violence, sexual discrimination and abuse. Bringing very young boys and girls together in schools has consequences that often lead to social degradation. To conclude, despite some advantages, coeducation has severe problems. From my experience, I can say that a separate educational system is healthy, free of discrimination and abuse. I hope that parents would be very thoughtful before deciding to send their children to a particular academy type.
Whether a single-sex or a uni-sex university is more advantageous and yields better results is open for debate. Single-sex
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schools
are preferred
by
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many
since they believe that it ensures a better environment for education while the proponents of coeducation argue that
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boys
and
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girls
should
be taught
together for a healthy competition and better mutual understanding.
Personally
, I prefer the single-sex institute method.

The advocates of the mixed-education system
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often
point out that when
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boys
and
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girls
study in the same institution, they grow a mutual understanding.
As a result
, it will ensure a wholesome work environment in the future.
Moreover
, this education system encourages a healthy competitive and
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helps
students excel not
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only
in their studies
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but
also
in other
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important
areas.
For instance
, when
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boys
and
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girls
are assigned
to a project, they tend to learn how to work together.
Reversely
, they
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often
compete to
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show
their supremacy and
thus
excel in education and learning.
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But
this is not the whole picture.

As a female, and as a student in both coeducational and separate
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schools
, I
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must
outline that I felt more comfortable being with
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girls
than
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boys
. In a perfect world, the mixed-sex
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schools
may produce far-reaching benefits,
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but
not in a world where we are
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often
shattered by the harsh reality. Single-sex
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schools
have less violence, sexual discrimination and abuse. Bringing
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very
young
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boys
and
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girls
together in
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schools
has consequences that
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often
lead to social degradation.

To conclude
, despite
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some
advantages, coeducation has severe problems. From my experience, I can say that a separate educational system is healthy, free of discrimination and abuse. I hope that parents would be
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very
thoughtful
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before
deciding to
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send
their children to a particular academy type.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You are interested in applying for a scholarship program to study at a foreign university Write a letter to inquire about about a course In your letter explain which course you are interested in tell what you know about the university explain why you shou v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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