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You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level. v.1

You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level. v. 1
DEAR SIR OR MADAM I HAVE JUST READ YOUR ADVERTISEMENT ABOUT HILL WALK FOR ONE WEEK IN THE TODAY'S NEWSPAPER. IT IS MY CHILDHOOD DREAM TO FO FOR A HIKING TRAIL ON THE MOUNTAIN BUT COULD NOT GET A CHANCE UNTILL NOW. THUS AFTER SEEING THE ADD I THOUGHT OF INQUIRING IN THE DETAIL ABOUT THE TRIP. COULD YOU PLEASE PROVIDE ME THAT WHCIH DATE IT WILL BE STARTED? AND WHAT ARE THE COSTS ASSOCIATED WITH IT? DO WALKERS NEED TO CARRY ANY EXTRA THINGS LIKE FOOD, TENT OR IS THERE ANY ARRANGEMENT FOR THE NIGHT STAY? IS IT A LONG WALK PER DAY OR JUST BIT ABOUT 5 KM? ARE THERE ANY EMERGENCY FACILITY AVAILABLE IF PEOPLE GET SICK OR SOME OTHER REASON? JUST ONE YAER AGO I MET WITH AN ACCIDENT AND BROKE MY LEG. DUE TO THE BREAKAGE FREQUENTLY I AM GETING PAIN IN THAT AREA. SO THAT IS WHY I THINK I AM UNFIT FOR THIS ADVENTURE. IF THERE WOULD BE SOME FACILITY LIKE FIRST AID KIT OR ANY EMERGENCY DOCTOR AVILABLE THEN IT WILL BE BENEFICIAL FOR PEOPLE LIKE ME AND HAPPYLLY I CAN BE A PART OF THE TRIP. PLEASE SNED ME A FULL BROCHURE IN DETAIL ON MY EMAIL ADDRESS WHICH IS DRSEFFALI@GMAIL. COM. IF POSSIBLE GIVE ME ANY SUGGESTIONS REGARDING MY HEALTH ISSUES WHILE ON THE TOUR. LOOKING FORWARD TO HEAR FROM YOU SOON. THANK YOU AND REGARDS SINCERELY SEFALI PATEL
DEAR SIR OR MADAM

I HAVE
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BIT ABOUT 5 KM? ARE THERE ANY EMERGENCY FACILITY AVAILABLE IF
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AVILABLE
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ME A FULL BROCHURE IN DETAIL ON MY EMAIL ADDRESS WHICH IS
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. COM. IF POSSIBLE GIVE ME ANY SUGGESTIONS REGARDING MY HEALTH ISSUES WHILE ON THE TOUR. LOOKING FORWARD TO HEAR FROM YOU
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THANK YOU AND REGARDS

SINCERELY


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IELTS essay You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level. v. 1

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
238 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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