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You saw an advertisement for a tennis course in England but you have one or two problems and cannot stay the whole course. Write a letter to the course director. In your letter: Explain your interest in the course; Describe you problems; Find out if a ref v.1

You saw an advertisement for a tennis course in England but you have one or two problems and cannot stay the whole course. Write a letter to the course director. In your letter: Explain your interest in the course; Describe you problems; Find out if a ref v. 1
In many countries traditional medicine is still eminent. Many believe that it is superior to modern medicine in terms of improvising the health. I completely disagree with this statement. People in the rural areas believe in simplicity. They are more comfortable with natural processes. For instance, many possess an opinion that traditional Chinese medicine has no side effects, because it utilizes the common herbs. As a result, they do not produce any harmful effects on our body. Moreover, they think it is better because they do not contain artificial ingredients. Consequently, the chances of them to cause toxicity, in our body is on a low side. Therefore, traditional medicine is considered a better choice, owing to its natural benefits. In contrast, modern medicine is preferable, because it completely cures the disease. This has led to decline in death rates. To illustrate, the robotic surgeries can now remove a diseased organ via minimally invasive approaches. Such strategy is leading to a faster healing time and ultimately, it ensures a good quality of life. Furthermore, the contents of modern medicine is known. For example, if a person takes aspirin for fever, we know what product it contains its side effects. If taken in excess, an antidote can reverse its dangerous impact. Therefore, modern medicine is a better alternative to the other forms of medicine. To conclude, traditional medicine is still practiced in most parts of the world. Many claim that it is better than modern medicine. However, I entirely disagree with this statement. In the foreseeable future, everyone will follow the modern medicine.
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traditional
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medicine
is
still
eminent.
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Many
believe that it is superior to
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modern
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medicine
in terms of improvising the health. I completely disagree with this statement.

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People
in the rural areas believe in simplicity. They are more comfortable with natural processes.
For instance
,
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many
possess an opinion that
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traditional
Chinese
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medicine
has no side effects,
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because
it utilizes the common herbs.
As a result
, they do not produce any harmful effects on our body.
Moreover
, they
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think
it is
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better
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because
they do not contain artificial ingredients.
Consequently
, the chances of them to cause toxicity, in our body is on a low side.
Therefore
,
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traditional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medicine
is considered
a
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better
choice, owing to its natural benefits.

In contrast
,
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modern
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medicine
is preferable,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it completely cures the disease. This has led to decline in death rates. To illustrate, the robotic surgeries can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
remove a diseased organ via
minimally
invasive approaches. Such strategy is leading to a faster healing time and
ultimately
, it ensures a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
quality of life.
Furthermore
, the contents of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
modern
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medicine
is known
.
For example
, if a person takes aspirin for fever, we know what product it contains its side effects. If taken in excess, an antidote can reverse its
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
dangerous
impact.
Therefore
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
modern
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medicine
is a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
better
alternative to the other forms of medicine.

To conclude
,
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traditional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medicine
is
still
practiced in most parts of the world.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
claim that it is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
better
than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
modern
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medicine
.
However
, I
entirely
disagree with this statement. In the foreseeable future, everyone will follow the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
modern
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medicine
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You saw an advertisement for a tennis course in England but you have one or two problems and cannot stay the whole course. Write a letter to the course director. In your letter: Explain your interest in the course; Describe you problems; Find out if a ref v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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