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Your teacher assigns a project to you, and you can select the members to work with. 1) choose the members who think and work in similar ways. 2) choose the members who have totally different ideas. Which would you think is more effective to work with? v.2

Your teacher assigns a project to you, and you can select the members to work with. 1) choose the members who think and work in similar ways. 2) choose the members who have totally different ideas. Which would you think is more effective to work with? v. 2
It is tempting to think that finishing a project with members who have totally different ideas could rise the diversity of the team, leading to a better result of the team asignment. Nevertheless, from my perspective, working with people who share similiar opinions is a more effective way to achieve success. On the one hand, teaming up with classmates of similar kind will reduce the cost of communication, which result from disagreements among team members. People who share the same character with each other are more likely to reach into an aggreement quicker and easier since they share similar logical partten. On the contrary, it is difficuty for total groups of students to agree with each other, which not only could cause conflicts among members but also waste significant amont of time for each student during the process of negotication. My roomate, for instance, once teamed up with her classmate to deliver a prosentation in Marketing class. Unfortunately, she and her team member shared totally different value and interest. My roomate wanted to force on finance industry and to make her PowerPoint look more professional. However, her classmate' s merely interest was video gomes and he insisted to make their presentaion more entertain and interesting. Eventually, their cooperation went to an dad end. They had to do their whole work again seperatedly a few days before the deadline. On the other hand, it is almost impossible to find a perfect time of meeting for every team member if they have totally different thoughts. The same kind of student are likely to have identitcal life style as well. It is not surprising, for example, that hard-working students usually get up early and usually do not stay up late. Nonetheless, people who enjoy night clubs and bars could not regulate themselves as strictly as other students. Taken my own experience as an example, I initially work with six people in my Business Comunication class to finish homwork. Some people were eager to finish it sooner while others did not want to start it untill deadline. Hard as we tried, we could only not find a proper time for everone and our homework was finished in hurry. Admittedly, having a bunch of people who have different ideas could bring the team with fresh thoughs and unique perspects of solving problems. Nevertheless, a relatively simple school work asigned by teachers, such as a presentation for English class or a Math question, is unlikely to be so complicated that so many different views and creativity are needed. In summary, there is no doubt that working with people of similar mind is a more efficient method to finish a task because similar people usaully are easiler to communicate, and that it will be less exhasuted to arrange a suitable time for meeting for each team member.
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asignment
.
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similiar
opinions is a more effective way to achieve success.

On the one hand, teaming up with classmates of
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similar
kind will
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reduce
the cost of communication, which result from disagreements among
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team
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members
.
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aggreement
quicker and easier since they share
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difficuty
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, which not
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,
for instance
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prosentation
in Marketing
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. Unfortunately, she and her
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team
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shared
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different
value and interest. My
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roomate
wanted to force on finance industry and to
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make
her PowerPoint look more professional.
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, her
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classmate&
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interest was video
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gomes and
he insisted to
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their
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presentaion
more entertain and interesting.
Eventually
, their cooperation went to
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an
dad
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end
. They had to do their whole work again
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seperatedly
a few days
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before
the deadline.

On the
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hand, it is almost impossible to find a perfect
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time
of meeting for every
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team
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member
if they have
totally
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different
thoughts. The same kind of
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student
are likely to have
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identitcal
life style
as well
. It is not surprising,
for example
, that
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hard
-working
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students
usually
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get
up early and
usually
do not stay up late. Nonetheless,
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people
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who
enjoy night clubs and bars could not regulate themselves as
strictly
as
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other
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students
. Taken my
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experience as an example, I
initially
work with six
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in my Business
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Comunication
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homwork
.
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were eager to finish it sooner while others did not want to
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untill
deadline.
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as we tried, we could
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not find a proper
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for
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everone
and our homework
was finished
in hurry.

Admittedly
, having a bunch of
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people
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who
have
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different
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ideas
could bring the
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team
with fresh
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thoughs
and unique
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perspects
of solving problems.
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, a
relatively
simple school work
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asigned
by teachers, such as a presentation for English
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or a Math question, is unlikely to be
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complicated that
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different
views and creativity
are needed
.

In summary, there is no doubt that working with
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people
of
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similar
mind is a more efficient method to finish a task
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because
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similar
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people
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usaully
are
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easiler
to communicate, and that it will be less
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exhasuted
to arrange a suitable
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time
for meeting for each
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team
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member
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
48Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
28Mistakes
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IELTS essay Your teacher assigns a project to you, and you can select the members to work with. 1) choose the members who think and work in similar ways. 2) choose the members who have totally different ideas. Which would you think is more effective to work with? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
470 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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