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TPO 44 - Question 4Scope CreepBusinesses that perform services or carry out projects for clients generally come to an agreement with their clients about the extent or scope of a project before beginning the project. However, as a project progresses, clien v.1

TPO 44 - Question 4Scope CreepBusinesses that perform services or carry out projects for clients generally come to an agreement with their clients about the extent or scope of a project before beginning the project. However, as a project progresses, clien v. 1
Nowadays, people tend to get a thrill from others failure without acknowledging their desire. Furthermore the consequence of a failure can deter people from taking risks particularly in professional life. I firmly believe that desire and failure are, however a stepping stone to succeed and in this essay we discuss the same. Firstly, more scientific marvels were derived from the desire to reach a goal. In technology not only the best inventions were discovered due to the courage the inventor had to keep experimenting but also it these inventions have brought the world into the modern era. These inventors would have failed numerous times to achieve their objective, but ultimately the result has changed the whole world. For example, Graham Bell created technology like telephone, without the thought of failing to cause hindrance to experiment. So failing is not a problem to reach a goal, but a curve ball to attain success. Secondly, Failure is important. Particularly, to learn from mistakes is clearly an example how to avoid them in the future and because of this more often than not has led great medical experiments like the cancer treating drugs become successful after a succession of failures. For instance, If the desire of the people involved in the experiment would have been hampered by their failure than a lot of lives would have been lost. To conclude, although failures are seen as a negative outcome in society, but the main goal of the person, if positive, should be encouraged and the desire to achieve success should be paramount and critical and we should not discourage people after failing.
Nowadays,
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people
tend to
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get
a thrill from others
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failure
without acknowledging their
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desire
.
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Furthermore
the consequence of a
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failure
can deter
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people
from taking
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risks
particularly
in professional life. I
firmly
believe that
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desire
and
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failure
are,
however
a stepping stone to succeed and in this essay we discuss the same.

Firstly
, more scientific marvels
were derived
from the
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desire
to reach a goal. In technology not
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only
the best inventions
were discovered
due to the courage the inventor had to
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keep
experimenting
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but
also
it these inventions have brought the world into the modern era. These inventors would have failed numerous times to achieve their objective,
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but
ultimately
the result has
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changed
the whole world.
For example
, Graham Bell created technology like telephone, without the
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thought
of failing to cause hindrance to experiment.
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So
failing is not a problem to reach a goal,
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but
a curve ball to attain success.

Secondly
,
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Failure
is
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important
.
Particularly
, to learn from mistakes is
clearly
an example how to avoid them in the future and
because of this
more
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often
than not has led great medical experiments like the cancer treating drugs become successful after a succession of
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failures
.
For instance
, If the
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desire
of the
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people
involved in the experiment would have
been hampered
by their
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failure
than
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a lot of
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lives
would have
been lost
.

To conclude
, although
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failures
are
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seen
as a
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negative
outcome in society,
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but
the main goal of the person, if
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positive
, should
be encouraged
and the
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desire
to achieve success should be paramount and
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critical and
we should not discourage
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people
after failing.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay TPO 44 - Question 4Scope CreepBusinesses that perform services or carry out projects for clients generally come to an agreement with their clients about the extent or scope of a project before beginning the project. However, as a project progresses, clien v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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