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When you have to discuss two different views, you have to: 1) Present both views. 2) Evaluate the strength of the arguments on both sides. 3) Challenge the ideas you disagree with and support the ideas you agree with by providing examples and evidence. 4) Remember that you don’t have to totally agree with one of the views. Express your own opinion, whatever it is. v.1

When you have to discuss two different views, you have to: 1) Present both views. 2) Evaluate the strength of the arguments on both sides. 3) Challenge the ideas you disagree with and support the ideas you agree with by providing examples and evidence. 4) Remember that you don’t have to totally agree with one of the views. Express your own opinion, whatever it is. v. 1
Some argue that the people in the modern world are in possession of much more knowledge than the people of ancient cultures. Others believe that this ignores the accomplishments of the past and places too much emphasis on present achievements. Well, it is undoubtedly true that modern technologies, such as the internet could not have been imagined in ancient cultures, it is a mistake to view these ancient cultures as ignorant. Few would argue that the builders of the Sphinx were mere primitive cavemen, for example. People at the time had the knowledge they needed to understand and deal with their world and in fact one argument that is sometimes put forward is that, even with all we know today, we do not have the technology to build the Pyramids of Egypt. Even if we do accept that modern society is richer in technological terms, it is undoubtedly poorer in spiritual terms. Our societies have become so complex that people often become victim to the lifestyles they lead and must face a whole new variety of widespread modern-day problems, such as stress and obesity which affect people in developed countries worldwide. Furthermore, the number of uneducated people still living in poverty with little opportunity to benefit from technological achievements suggests that our modern society is not so advanced after all. In my view, however, there is no comparison between what we can achieve today and what people even two hundred years ago could achieve as we now know so much more. The vast majority of people in developed countries are able to benefit from an education system, standard of living, healthcare and life expectancy that is so much more advanced than ever before. It is my personal opinion that although we must remember and respect ancient cultures, modern day achievements have brought us to the peak of human civilisation.
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much
emphasis on present achievements.

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undoubtedly
true that
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modern
technologies, such as the internet could not have
been imagined
in
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ancient
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cultures
, it is a mistake to view these
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ancient
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cultures
as ignorant. Few would argue that the builders of the Sphinx were mere primitive cavemen,
for example
.
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at the time had the knowledge they needed to understand and deal with their world and in fact one argument
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put forward is that, even with all we know
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, we do not have the technology to build the Pyramids of Egypt.

Even if we do accept that
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society is richer in technological terms, it is
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poorer in spiritual terms. Our societies have become
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complex that
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people
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become victim to the lifestyles they lead and
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face a whole new variety of widespread modern-day problems, such as
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stress
and obesity which affect
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in
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developed countries
worldwide.
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still
living in poverty with
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little
opportunity to benefit from technological achievements suggests that our
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society is not
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so
advanced
after all
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however
, there is no comparison between what we can achieve
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today
and what
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even two hundred years ago could achieve as we
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know
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developed countries
are able to benefit from an education system, standard of living, healthcare and life expectancy
that is
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so
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much
more advanced than ever
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before
. It is my personal opinion that although we
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must
remember and respect
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ancient
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,
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day achievements have brought us to the peak of human
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Language comes first. It’s not that language grows out of consciousness, if you haven’t got language, you can’t be conscious.
Alan Moore

IELTS essay When you have to discuss two different views, you have to: 1) Present both views. 2) Evaluate the strength of the arguments on both sides. 3) Challenge the ideas you disagree with and support the ideas you agree with by providing examples and evidence. 4) Remember that you don’t have to totally agree with one of the views. Express your own opinion, whatever it is. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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