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Your neighbours have recently written to you to complain about the noise from your house/flat. Write a letter to your neighbours. In the letter: - Explain the reason for the noise; - Apologize; - Describe what action you will take. v.3

Your neighbours have recently written to you to complain about the noise from your house/flat. Write a letter to your neighbours. In the letter: - Explain the reason for the noise; - Apologize; - Describe what action you will take. v. 3
Dear Ms or Mr Smith, I am writing to you to apologize for the loudly noise that is disturbing you and forced you to notify me. Wasn’t my intention to upset the neighbourhood. Let me explain in more details my situation. A few months back, me and my friends enrolled ourselves in a contest, in college, called Battle Band to compete among singers and performers for the winning prize: a thousand dollars. We got a lot of positive reactions and decided to give it a try on the musical industry. Since then, we were practicing to play in bars and events across town, and received a chance to play in Old Bar Alley, next to the sport centre in downtown next week. However, in behalf of the member of the band, I apologize sincerely for all the noise and loud music, but we were rehearsing to play in this bar. Would you kindly consider to wait until next week so we can find another place to practice? If not, we could go to one o four member’s house to play in his garage since the place is quieter and have few neighbours near by. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Rafael
Dear Ms or Mr Smith,

I am writing to you to apologize for the
loudly
noise
that is
disturbing you and forced you to notify me. Wasn’t my intention to upset the
Possible spelling mistake. 'neighbourhood' is British English.
neighbourhood
.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Let
me
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
in more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
my situation. A few months back, me and my friends enrolled ourselves in a contest, in college, called Battle Band to compete among singers and performers for the winning prize: a thousand dollars. We
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
reactions and decided to give it a try on the musical industry. Since then, we were practicing to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
play
in bars and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
across town, and received a chance to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
play
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Old
Bar Alley,
next
to the sport
Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.
centre
in downtown
next
week.

However
, in behalf of the member of the band, I apologize
sincerely
for all the noise and loud music,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
we were rehearsing to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
play
in this bar.

Would you kindly consider to wait until
next
week
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
we can find another place to practice? If not, we could go to one o four
Possible agreement error. The noun 'member' seems to be countable, so consider using: "members".
member
’s
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
play
in his garage since the place is quieter and have few
Possible spelling mistake. 'neighbours' is British English.
neighbours
Did you mean "nearby"?
near by
.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
sincerely
,

Rafael
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
If we spoke a different language, we would perceive a somewhat different world.
Ludwig Wittgenstein

IELTS essay Your neighbours have recently written to you to complain about the noise from your house/flat. Write a letter to your neighbours. In the letter: - Explain the reason for the noise; - Apologize; - Describe what action you will take. v. 3

Essay
  American English
8 paragraphs
203 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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