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Nowadays, full-time university student tend to focus on their studying. Some people think it is essential for university students to be involved in other activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Nowadays, full-time university student tend to focus on their studying. Some people think it is essential for university students to be involved in other activities. v. 2
University education plays an imperative role in shaping career of a student. It presents an opportunity to gain knowledge and makes an individual adept in handling work better. In order to get good jobs and have a bright future, education is a prerequisite. It is lucid from the statement that full-time university students focus more on their studies these days. A number of reasons support this statement. Firstly, students are more concerned about their future these days and are very serious towards their studies. Alumni of reputed universities and business schools are preferred over others who graduate from Tier 2 or lower institutions. Secondly, education is quite expensive these days. Some students, who study through financial grants and loans, tend to more serious towards their studies as they need to clear their financial debt as soon as possible. All these reasons prompt individuals to be diligent towards their education and stay focused. Another school of thought holds an ideology that it is essential for students to be active in other activities as well. I am in strong agreement with this thought as education is directly related to the overall development of an individual. Pursuing hobbies and extra-curricular activities present an opportunity for personality development which is equally important these days. Corporations and businesses prefer individuals who are adept in all verticals of business. The students with good personality have better chances of succeeding at leadership roles and can tackle problems effectively. To recapitulate, focusing on the academic study is important for university students. However, at the same time, the importance of extra-curricular activities cannot be neglected. Colleges and universities change their curriculum and incorporate activities that allow overall development of students. Students are building blocks of a nation and providing them with better opportunities of learning will contribute to nation building.
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University
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education
plays an imperative role in shaping career of a
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student
. It presents an opportunity to gain knowledge and
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makes
an
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individual
adept in handling work better. In order to
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get
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good
jobs and have a bright future,
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education
is a prerequisite.

It is lucid from the statement that full-time
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university
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students
focus more on their
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studies
these days. A number of reasons support this statement.
Firstly
,
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students
are more concerned about their future these days and are
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very
serious towards their
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studies
. Alumni of reputed
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universities
and business schools
are preferred
over others who graduate from Tier 2 or lower institutions.
Secondly
,
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education
is quite expensive these days.
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Some
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students
, who
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study
through financial grants and loans, tend to more serious towards their
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studies
as they need to
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clear
their financial debt as
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soon
as possible. All these reasons prompt
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individuals
to be diligent towards their
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education
and stay focused.

Another school of
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thought
holds an ideology that it is essential for
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students
to be active in other
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activities
as well
. I am in strong agreement with this
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thought
as
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education
is
directly
related to the
overall
development of an
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individual
. Pursuing hobbies and extra-curricular
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activities
present an opportunity for personality development which is
equally
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important
these days. Corporations and businesses prefer
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individuals
who are adept in all verticals of business. The
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students
with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
personality have better chances of succeeding at leadership roles and can tackle problems
effectively
.

To recapitulate, focusing on the academic
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study
is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
for
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university
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students
.
However
, at the same time, the importance of extra-curricular
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activities
cannot
be neglected
. Colleges and
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universities
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
their curriculum and incorporate
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activities
that
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allow
overall
development of
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students
.
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Students
are building blocks of a nation and providing them with better opportunities of learning will contribute to nation building.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays, full-time university student tend to focus on their studying. Some people think it is essential for university students to be involved in other activities. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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