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our neighbours have recently written to you to complain about the noise from your house flat. Write a letter to your neighbours. In your letterexplain the reasons for the noiseapologisedescribe what action you will take v.1

our neighbours have recently written to you to complain about the noise from your house flat. Write a letter to your neighbours. In your letterexplain the reasons for the noiseapologisedescribe what action you will take v. 1
Social media has become an ever increasingly used tool to connect with the people and to get the daily scoop of the news stories. This essay shall first discuss an advantage of the quick and the easy access to the people and the news that the social media provides, followed by a disadvantage of people losing their ability of having a human connection. Technology and the social websites in particular, enables us to get in touch with our friends and family at a touch of a button. Not only can people connect with each other from miles away, but they can also be virtually present in important family events to feel more involved in the lives of their loved ones. Additionally, While the people are away from their home, they can keep themselves apprised about what is happening in their region. For example, many students studying in foreign universities stay connected with their families back home via Facebook and Instagram. On the downside, a big disadvantage these websites causes is it diminishes the need to have face-to-face interactions. When the people can talk to someone by just clicking a few buttons, they neither feel the need nor the importance of meeting someone in person, which in turn makes people more distant from one another. For example, these days, many kids wish their parents on their birthday by posting a message on Facebook unlike in the olden days when they used to do it by giving their parents a warm hug. To sum up, although social media can give us a rapid connection to the people across the globe, it can make us lose our human nature of meeting people as well. In my opinion, the advantages of social media surely outweighs the disadvantages because humans have an innate ability to connect with people.
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Social
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media
has become an ever
increasingly
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used
tool to connect with the
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people
and to
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get
the daily scoop of the news stories. This essay shall
first
discuss an advantage of the quick and the easy access to the
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people
and the news that the
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social
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media
provides, followed by a disadvantage of
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people
losing their ability of having a human connection.

Technology and the
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social
websites
in particular
, enables us to
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get
in touch with our friends and family at a touch of a button. Not
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only
can
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people
connect with each other from miles away,
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but
they can
also
be
virtually
present in
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important
family
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events
to feel more involved in the
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lives
of their
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loved
ones.
Additionally
, While the
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people
are away from their home, they can
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keep
themselves apprised about what is happening in their region.
For example
,
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many
students studying in foreign universities stay connected with their families back home via Facebook and Instagram.

On the downside, a
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big
disadvantage these websites causes is it diminishes the need to have face-to-face interactions. When the
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people
can talk to someone by
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just
clicking a few buttons, they neither feel the need nor the importance of meeting someone in person, which in turn
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makes
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people
more distant from one another.
For example
, these days,
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many
kids wish their parents on their birthday by posting a message on Facebook unlike in the olden days when they
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used
to do it by giving their parents a warm hug.

To sum up, although
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social
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media
can give us a rapid connection to the
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people
across the globe, it can
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make
us lose our human nature of meeting
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people
as well
. In my opinion, the advantages of
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social
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media
surely
outweighs the disadvantages
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because
humans have an innate ability to connect with
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people
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
The man who does not know other languages, unless he is a man of genius, necessarily has deficiencies in his ideas.
Victor Hugo

IELTS essay our neighbours have recently written to you to complain about the noise from your house flat. Write a letter to your neighbours. In your letterexplain the reasons for the noiseapologisedescribe what action you will take v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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