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Your neighbour has recently written to you to complain about the noise from your house flat Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter •Explain the reason for the noise •Apologise •Describe what action you will take Write at least 150 wordsYou v.1

Your neighbour has recently written to you to complain about the noise from your house flat Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter •Explain the reason for the noise •Apologise •Describe what action you will take You v. 1
Nowadays, children in many countries are suffering from overweight issues in addition to fatigue problems which were less common in previous decades. This essay discusses some of the reasons for these challenges and then tries to offer reasonable solutions to overcome them. There are many causes of recent deterioration in youngsters’ health and an increase in their weight. A principle reason for these problems is modern dietary habits. Children frequently consume sugars and fats. In addition to eating unhealthy food, children’s current lifestyle does not include sufficient amount of physical activities. Therefore, children are not growing their physical abilities to improve their fitness, nor burning enough calories to reduce their weight. In fact, numerous studies concluded that, children who do not spend enough time exercising are prone to suffer from overweight and fatigue more than other children. Many mitigation measures can be taken into consideration to overcome these problems. To start with, schools could encourage students to engage in different physical activities during school hours. This can be done by conducting awareness campaigns at schools to encourage them to integrate physical activities to classic classes. Also, using the media to raise the level of awareness in society about these challenges could prove to be helpful. These awareness campaigns could be guided to result in changing the parents’ way of thinking about this matter, which will lead some of them to change their childrens dietary and physical exercise habits. For example, Norway did a national awareness campaign about child obesity two years ago, and that resulted in a significant drop in health and weight issues between school students. In conclusion, children’s obesity, fatigue and health level problems grew significantly due to unhealthy dietary systems and lower engagement in physical activities. I believe that this could be overcome by increasing the amount of physical exercise in schools, in addition to using the media for awareness campaigns.
Nowadays,
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children
in
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many
countries are suffering from overweight issues
in addition
to fatigue
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problems
which were less common in previous decades. This essay discusses
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some of the
reasons for these challenges and then tries to offer reasonable solutions to overcome them.

There are
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many
causes of recent deterioration in youngsters’ health and an increase in their weight. A
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principle
reason for these
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problems
is modern dietary habits.
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Children
frequently
consume sugars and fats.
In addition
to eating unhealthy food,
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children’s
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current
lifestyle does not include sufficient amount of
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physical
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activities
.
Therefore
,
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children
are not growing their
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physical
abilities to
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improve
their fitness, nor burning
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enough
calories to
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reduce
their weight. In fact, numerous studies concluded that,
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children
who do not spend
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enough
time exercising are prone to suffer from overweight and fatigue more than other children.

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Many
mitigation measures can
be taken
into consideration to overcome these
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problems
. To
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start
with,
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schools
could encourage students to engage in
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different
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physical
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activities
during
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school
hours. This can
be done
by conducting
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awareness
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campaigns
at
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schools
to encourage them to integrate
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physical
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activities
to classic classes.
Also
, using the media to raise the level of
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awareness
in society about these challenges could prove to be helpful. These
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awareness
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campaigns
could
be guided
to result in changing the parents’ way of thinking about this matter, which will lead
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some
of them to
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change
their
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childrens
dietary and
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physical
exercise habits.
For example
, Norway did a national
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awareness
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campaign
about child obesity two years ago, and that resulted in a significant drop in health and weight issues between
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school
students.

In conclusion
,
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children’s
obesity, fatigue and health level
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problems
grew
significantly
due to unhealthy dietary systems and lower engagement in
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physical
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activities
. I believe that this could
be overcome
by increasing the amount of
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physical
exercise in
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schools
,
in addition
to using the media for
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awareness
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campaigns
.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Your neighbour has recently written to you to complain about the noise from your house flat Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter •Explain the reason for the noise •Apologise •Describe what action you will take You v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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