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Your local newspaper would like to have a new regular weekly feature on a subject of interest for readers Readers are being encouraged to make suggestions sent in an email to the newspaper Write an email to the newspaper In your email suggest a topic that v.1

Your local newspaper would like to have a new regular weekly feature on a subject of interest for readers Readers are being encouraged to make suggestions sent in an email to the newspaper Write an email to the newspaper In your email suggest a topic that v. 1
The evolution of internet has changed the eon tremendously and it has provided the world option to access the open knowledge, just by one click on their gadgets and that too without any cost. Despite the numerous benefits of such trend, however the drastic impact it made on mankind cannot be ignored. Firstly, There are various positive things, which are resulted from the concept of internet. One can always keep oneself updated about the new trends worldwide. As the internet can be accessed to derive current and fresh information about nearly everything. For example, it can be approached, either to know the condition of the share market or to check the score of any game of interest. Further the internet can be useful to circulate a vital message by government agencies to issue any precautionary measures and ways to counter any kind of pandemic. For illustration, at the time of spreading corona vires internet proved to be the most instant and useful to aware people about the outcomes and prevention from the disease. Secondly, on the other hand the internet is appearing to be having some negative points too. One of such point is unverified and unauthentic information, which is widely available or posted by the unknown resources. Such information can be proved misleading sometimes. For example, fake news at the time of an epidemic can create chaos in the public. Moreover, it is very easy to post anything online and at sometimes such publishing may infringe the rights of other individuals. For illustration, uploading a song on YouTube without permission of the person with intellectual rights is a crime of piracy and can affect the singer or producer financially. In a nutshell, it can be said even though, it is evident that the internet has flooded our lives with the important or necessary information and it has become inseparable part of our routine, however such information must not be grasped or imbibed by one without confirming authenticity of the source of such information and one must always use some prudence to believe in anything broadcasted online.
The evolution of internet has
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changed
the eon
tremendously
and it has provided the world option to access the open knowledge,
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just
by one click on their gadgets and that too without any cost. Despite the numerous benefits of such trend,
however
the drastic impact it made on mankind cannot be
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ignored
.

Firstly
, There are various
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positive
things, which
are resulted
from the concept of internet. One can always
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keep
oneself updated about the new trends worldwide. As the internet can
be accessed
to derive
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current
and fresh
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information
about
nearly
everything.
For example
, it can
be approached
, either to know the condition of the share market or to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
the score of any game of interest.
Further
the internet can be useful to circulate a vital message by
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government
agencies to issue any precautionary measures and ways to counter any kind of pandemic. For illustration, at the time of spreading corona
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vires
internet proved to be the most instant and useful to aware
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people
about the outcomes and prevention from the disease.

Secondly
,
on the other hand
the internet
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is appearing
to be having
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some
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negative
points too. One of such point
is unverified
and unauthentic
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information
, which is
widely
available or posted by the unknown resources. Such
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information
can
be proved
misleading
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sometimes
.
For example
, fake news at the time of an epidemic can create chaos in the public.
Moreover
, it is
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very
easy to post anything online and at
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sometimes
such publishing may infringe the rights of other individuals. For illustration, uploading a song on YouTube without permission of the person with intellectual rights is a crime of piracy and can affect the singer or producer
financially
.

In a nutshell, it can
be said
even though
, it is evident that the internet has flooded our
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lives
with the
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important
or necessary
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information
and it has become inseparable part of our routine,
however
such
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information
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must
not
be grasped
or imbibed by one without confirming authenticity of the source of such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
and one
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must
always
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use
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some
prudence to believe in anything broadcasted online.
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IELTS essay Your local newspaper would like to have a new regular weekly feature on a subject of interest for readers Readers are being encouraged to make suggestions sent in an email to the newspaper Write an email to the newspaper In your email suggest a topic that v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
347 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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