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The chart compares average house prices in 5 different cities in the world from 1990 to 2002 with them in 1989. Units are measured in percentage. v.1

The chart compares average house prices in 5 different cities in the world from 1990 to 2002 with them in 1989. Units are measured in percentage. v. 1
Today, less social intimacy among neighbours has become normal due to this technology-based and fast-paced world. This case can primarily be tackled by people's frequent involvement in community-based programmes. In this essay, some other potential solutions will be suggested after the causes are discussed. Currently, people are showing less interest in their neighbors since they have been preoccupied with their work and personal life, having insufficient time for other things. Thus, they may hardly interact with their neighbours. Furthermore, these days, because of the entertaining and flexible accessibility of social media, many people are spending most of their leisure time on social networking such as Facebook and Instagram which keep them far away from the real social community. Another reason is that as the rampant acceleration of crimes is occurring, many people are automatically becoming cautious and suspected about other people. Consequently, they tend to become isolated from neighbors nearby while they are in constant fear of being harmed. Regarding some solutions, so as to imbue people's minds with a sense of community in the neighborhood, residents ought to be attracted to many programs organized by community officials and executives, for example, social gatherings and meetings that assemble neighbors in one place. Besides, people have to work for feasible hours, socializing mostly with people instead of being obsessed with tech-savvy machinery. Finally, organizing social events and clubs to encourage camaraderie among people can be an extremely effective action to tighten people's neighboring bonds. In conclusion, people might not be able to keep constant contact with neighbours mainly due to technologies and current hectic schedule. However, drifting apart from techno-devices, working moderately and being involved in social life nearby could be solutions to this problem.
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Today
, less
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social
intimacy among
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neighbours
has become normal due to this technology-based and
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fast
-paced world. This case can
primarily
be tackled
by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
's frequent involvement in community-based
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programmes
. In this essay,
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some
other potential solutions will
be suggested
after the causes
are discussed
.

Currently
,
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people
are showing less interest in their neighbors since they have
been preoccupied
with their work and personal life, having insufficient time for other things.
Thus
, they may hardly interact with their
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neighbours
.
Furthermore
, these days,
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because
of the entertaining and flexible accessibility of
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social
media,
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many
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people
are spending most of their leisure time on
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social
networking such as Facebook and Instagram which
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keep
them far away from the real
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social
community. Another reason is that as the rampant acceleration of crimes is occurring,
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many
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people
are
automatically
becoming cautious and suspected about other
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people
.
Consequently
, they tend to become isolated from neighbors nearby while they are in constant fear of
being harmed
.

Regarding
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some
solutions,
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so as to
imbue
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people
's minds with a sense of community in the neighborhood, residents ought to
be attracted
to
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many
programs organized by community officials and executives,
for example
,
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social
gatherings and meetings that assemble neighbors in one place.
Besides
,
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people
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have to
work for feasible hours, socializing
mostly
with
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people
instead
of
being obsessed
with tech-savvy machinery.
Finally
, organizing
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social
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
and clubs to encourage camaraderie among
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
can be an
extremely
effective action to tighten
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
's neighboring bonds.

In conclusion
,
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people
might not be able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
constant contact with
Possible spelling mistake. 'neighbours' is British English.
neighbours
mainly
due to technologies and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
hectic schedule.
However
, drifting apart from techno-devices, working
moderately
and
being involved
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
life nearby could be solutions to this problem.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The chart compares average house prices in 5 different cities in the world from 1990 to 2002 with them in 1989. Units are measured in percentage. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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