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A local magazine editor has asked for readers’ opinions about the magazine. Write a letter to the magazineeditor. In the letter, * Describe what made you choose the magazine* What do you like and dislike about the magazine* Suggest the improvements you w v.1

A local magazine editor has asked for readers’ opinions about the magazine. Write a letter to the magazineeditor. In the letter, * Describe what made you choose the magazine* What do you like and dislike about the magazine* Suggest the improvements you w v. 1
Due to the recent development of the tourism industry, a large number of economies rely on the holiday makers. However, it is argued that this trend has encouraged the uncertainty between the people from different nations. This essay will illustrate the fact that completely disagree with this argument. To begin with, the purpose of visiting other nations is not only to see, the natural landscape of those countries, but also to learn about the culture and the lifestyle of the inhabitant. The context of tourism has been changed over the years. In the past people travelled other countries sorely to see the nature. Nonetheless, now they are more interested in the way other people live such as their traditions, history and the type of foods they eat. Hence, the holiday makers do interact with locals more often these days. As a result, it helps people to understand the background of each other. Moreover, communities around the world have identified the significance of the tourism industry for their economy. Educational standard of every nation has increased over the years. Therefore, people start to understand the importance of holiday makers for the development of their nation. Rather than criticizing it, now people try to live along with it by welcoming those who come from other countries. For instance, in Sri Lanka it is forbidden to enter a temple with inappropriate clothes. Hence, at the entrance of these religious places tourists are offered with free clothes to cover themselves. In conclusion, locals and tourists nowadays trying to understand each other than the past. This is because tourists come to see the culture of other parts of the world and local people has identified the significance of this for their economy. Therefore, I disagree with the argument that states the tourism creates the cultural tension.
Due to the recent development of the
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industry,
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a large number of
economies rely on the holiday makers.
However
, it
is argued
that this trend has encouraged the uncertainty between the
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people
from
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different
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nations
. This essay will illustrate the fact that completely disagree with this argument.

To
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begin
with, the purpose of visiting
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other
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nations
is not
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only
to
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see
, the natural landscape of those countries,
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but
also
to learn about the culture and the lifestyle of the inhabitant. The context of
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tourism
has been
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changed
over the years. In the past
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people
travelled
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other
countries
sorely
to
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see
the nature. Nonetheless,
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now
they are more interested in the way
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other
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people
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live
such as their traditions, history and the type of foods they eat.
Hence
, the holiday makers do interact with locals more
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often
these days.
As a result
, it
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helps
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people
to understand the background of each other.

Moreover
, communities around the world have identified the significance of the
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tourism
industry for their economy. Educational standard of every
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nation
has increased over the years.
Therefore
,
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
to understand the importance of holiday makers for the development of their
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nation
.
Rather
than criticizing it,
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now
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people
try to
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live
along with it by welcoming those who
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come
from
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other
countries.
For instance
, in Sri Lanka it
is forbidden
to enter a temple with inappropriate clothes.
Hence
, at the entrance of these religious places tourists
are offered
with free clothes to cover themselves.

In conclusion
, locals and tourists nowadays trying to understand each
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other
than the past. This is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
tourists
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come
to
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see
the culture of
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other
parts of the world and local
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people
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has
identified the significance of this for their economy.
Therefore
, I disagree with the argument that states the
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tourism
creates the cultural tension.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay A local magazine editor has asked for readers’ opinions about the magazine. Write a letter to the magazineeditor. In the letter, * Describe what made you choose the magazine* What do you like and dislike about the magazine* Suggest the improvements you w v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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