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Your landlord wants to increase the rent Write a letter to him telling him why you think rent should not be increased and what will you do if it s increased v.1

Your landlord wants to increase the rent Write a letter to him telling him why you think rent should not be increased and what will you do if it s increased v. 1
The death penalty is a very sensitive subject for many people in today's society. While many believe that capital punishment should be given to those who committed violent crimes, the rest of the population does not accept it as a suitable punishment in a modern society. Personally, I believe that the death penalty is not only cruel and inhumane, it actually leads to criminals acting more violently when being pursued by law enforcement, resulting in more casualties. The most common argument from people who think that it is advantageous to have the death penalty is that it serves justice for victims who get killed in an act of crime. Ultimately, this group of people often believes that "an eye for an eye" is the basis of good justice. Occasionally, people would suggest that getting rid of serious criminals with the death penalty would save the government money long term because they do not need to build and maintain high security prisons to keep these high-risk offenders locked up. There are numerous disadvantages for having a death penalty in our society. The most obvious counter argument for it is the belief that taking someone's life away is never a solution under any circumstances. Particularly, for religious people, it is believed that only God has control over people's life. No human being should be granted such a power. More importantly, our legal system is not perfect, meaning that its judgement is not always flawless. Unfortunately, many cases of wrongful convictions in the past have been well documented. Finally, it would be a major tragedy to sentence to a death penalty only to find out later that the same person did not commit the crime as accused. In conclusion, I believe that capital punishment should not be allowed in our society. Human life is very precious, therefore it should always be preserved. Although people may have committed serious crimes, they should be treated humanely and given a second chance.
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people
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believe
that capital punishment should be
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given
to those who committed violent
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crimes
, the rest of the population does not accept it as a suitable punishment in a modern
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society
.
Personally
, I
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believe
that the death
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is not
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only
cruel and inhumane, it actually leads to criminals acting more
violently
when
being pursued
by law enforcement, resulting in more casualties.

The most common argument from
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people
who
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that it is advantageous to have the death
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penalty
is that it serves justice for victims who
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get
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crime
.
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is the basis of
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good
justice.
Occasionally
,
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people
would suggest that getting rid of serious criminals with the death
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penalty
would save the
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money long term
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because
they do not need to build and maintain high security prisons to
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keep
these high-
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offenders locked up.

There are numerous disadvantages for having a death
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penalty
in our
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society
. The most obvious counter argument for it is the belief that taking someone's life away is never a solution under any circumstances.
Particularly
, for religious
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people
, it
is believed
that
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only
God has control over
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people
's life. No human being should
be granted
such a power. More
importantly
, our legal system is not perfect, meaning that its judgement is not always flawless. Unfortunately,
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many
cases of wrongful convictions in the past have been well documented.
Finally
, it would be a major tragedy to sentence to a death
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penalty
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only
to find out later that the same person did not commit the
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crime
as accused.

In conclusion
, I
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believe
that capital punishment should not be
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allowed
in our
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society
. Human life is
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very
precious,
therefore
it should always
be preserved
. Although
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people
may have committed serious
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crimes
, they should
be treated
humanely
and
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given
a second chance.
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IELTS essay Your landlord wants to increase the rent Write a letter to him telling him why you think rent should not be increased and what will you do if it s increased v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
326 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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