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Your landlord wants to increase your house rent. Write a letter to him to explain your situation. In your letter, you should tell: – why you think the rent shouldn’t be increased– what you will do if it is increased. v.1

Your landlord wants to increase your house rent. Write a letter to him to explain your situation. In your letter, you should tell: – why you think the rent shouldn’t be increased– what you will do if it is increased. v. 1
The increasing volume of e-commerce will one day end up shutting down all the brick and mortar shops in the city and town. I strongly believe in this because of the variety of advantages that the online retail offers. Online shopping offers huge varieties of products and brands at various prices and qualities. For example, when buying clothing thousands of designs can be explored before making the purchase at the comfort of ones home just by scrolling and clicking through a few pages on the internet. On the other hand when going to a shop people may not be able to explore as many designs and brands as they can in online shopping in short time. People can order products to be delivered to their home instead of having to drive to different shops which can often be time consuming. Many online retail sites take returns of products if they are found to be faulty or if the customer is not satisfied with the quality of the product. Although few giant retail shops offer such services many smaller retail shops do not take returns of products ones they are sold. This limitation will make those shops less favourable for the customers. Moreover, the pricing advantage that the online retail shops offer will be unbeatable by the retail shops because of the sheer volume and customer base of the online e-commerce sites. Because millions of people choose to buy from online retail sites these companies will be able to offer different products at considerable discounts compared to brick and mortar shops where only few customers visit and even fewer buy products from them. Some e-commerce sites provide options to order products in bulk quantities, hence further reducing the pricing of the products. Since online retail has become very competitive different online shopping sites cut down prices based on their competitors pricing to stay ahead in the business. In conclusion, shops are going to find it impossible to compete with the sales volume, pricing and customer base of online retail sites. Many advantages that online shopping offers to its customers will one day lead to all the shops in many places closing.
The increasing volume of e-commerce will one day
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end
up shutting down all the brick and mortar
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shops
in the city and town. I
strongly
believe in this
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because
of the variety of advantages that the
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online
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retail
offers.

Online
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shopping
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offers
huge varieties of
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products
and brands at various prices and qualities.
For example
, when buying clothing thousands of designs can
be explored
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before
making the
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purchase
at the comfort of
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ones
home
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just
by scrolling and clicking through a few pages on the internet.
On the other hand
when going to a
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shop
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people
may not be able to explore as
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many
designs and brands as they can in
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online
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shopping
in short time.
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People
can order
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products
to
be delivered
to their home
instead
of having to drive to
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different
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shops
which can
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often
be
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time consuming
.
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Many
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online
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retail
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sites
take returns of
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products
if they
are found
to be faulty or if the
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customer
is not satisfied with the quality of the
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product
.
“Although” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Although
few giant
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retail
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shops
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offer
such services
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many
smaller
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retail
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shops
do not take returns of
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products
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ones
they
are sold
. This limitation will
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make
those
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shops
less
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favourable
for the customers.

Moreover
, the
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pricing
advantage that the
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online
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retail
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shops
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offer
will be unbeatable by the
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retail
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shops
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because
of the sheer volume and
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customer
base of the
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online
e-commerce
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sites
.
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Because
millions of
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people
choose to
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buy
from
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online
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retail
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sites
these
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companies
will be able to
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offer
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different
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products
at considerable discounts compared to brick and mortar
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shops
where
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only
few
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customers
visit and even fewer
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buy
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products
from them.
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Some
e-commerce
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sites
provide options to order
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products
in bulk quantities,
hence
further
reducing the
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pricing
of the
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products
.
“Since” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Since
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online
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retail
has become
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very
competitive
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different
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online
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shopping
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sites
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cut
down prices based on their competitors
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pricing
to stay ahead in the business.

In conclusion
,
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shops
are going to find it impossible to compete with the sales volume,
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pricing
and
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customer
base of
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online
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retail
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sites
.
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Many
advantages that
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online
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shopping
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offers
to its
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customers
will one day lead to all the
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shops
in
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many
places closing.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
I am always sorry when any language is lost, because languages are the pedigrees of nations.
Samuel Johnson

IELTS essay Your landlord wants to increase your house rent. Write a letter to him to explain your situation. In your letter, you should tell: – why you think the rent shouldn’t be increased– what you will do if it is increased. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
360 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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