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1. Talk about a pleasant and memorable event that happened while you were in school. Explain why this event brings back fond memories. v.1

1. Talk about a pleasant and memorable event that happened while you were in school. Explain why this event brings back fond memories. v. 1
Nowadays, the sophisticated devices have developed at an unprecedented pace in our society that influence the existing public libraries. Some people point out that government will no longer need to provide the traditional libraries. From my point of view, libraries should still have to maintain for public in spite of the fact that technology have replaced in this modern world. There are a number of reasons why it is worth investing in maintaining public libraries. Firstly, although anyone who comes from different backgrounds, they can be members for dispensing information, borrowing books, magazines or journals from libraries and even can access for twenty-four hours. Moreover, the sources from books are more reliable than computers where people might sometimes get irrelevant information because these books are published by professional authors around the globe. Additionally, most of the elder people become less adaptive to new technologies such as how to surf the materials related to their specialized field that are easily available through computer by clicking mouse. On the other hand, there are some people who assert that they can get up-to-date from computers compared to old books. They feel that they can easily surf the internet they want by sitting and clicking in their home. Moreover, they also enjoy the colourful breaking advertisement from computers and less boring in reading printed books. Finally, they do not need to wait longer for books borrowed by someone like the ancient time. In conclusion, from my point of view, public libraries are deserved to maintain as they are irreplaceable resources and intended for everybody from different financial status to encourage the value of reading.
Nowadays, the sophisticated devices have developed at an unprecedented pace in our society that influence the existing
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public
libraries.
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Some
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people
point out that
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government
will no longer need to provide the traditional libraries. From my point of view, libraries should
still
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have to
maintain for
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public
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in spite of
the fact that technology have replaced in this modern world.

There are a number of reasons why it is worth investing in maintaining
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public
libraries.
Firstly
, although anyone who
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comes
from
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different
backgrounds, they can be members for dispensing information, borrowing
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books
, magazines or journals from libraries and even can access for twenty-four hours.
Moreover
, the sources from
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books
are more reliable than computers where
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people
might
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sometimes
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get
irrelevant information
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because
these
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books
are published
by professional authors around the globe.
Additionally
, most of the elder
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people
become less adaptive to new technologies such as how to surf the materials related to their specialized field that are
easily
available through computer by clicking mouse.

On the other hand
, there are
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some
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people
who assert that they can
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get
up-to-date from computers compared to
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old
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books
. They feel that they can
easily
surf the internet they want by sitting and clicking in their home.
Moreover
, they
also
enjoy the
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colourful
breaking advertisement from computers and less boring in reading printed
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books
.
Finally
, they do not need to wait longer for
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books
borrowed by someone like the ancient time.

In conclusion
, from my point of view,
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public
libraries
are deserved
to maintain as they are irreplaceable resources and intended for everybody from
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different
financial status to encourage the value of reading.
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IELTS essay 1. Talk about a pleasant and memorable event that happened while you were in school. Explain why this event brings back fond memories. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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