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You are unable to pay your rent due to some financial problems you are facing. Write a letter to your landlord telling himWhy you are writing himWhy you are unable to pay your rentWhen you will be able to pay your rent v.1

You are unable to pay your rent due to some financial problems you are facing. Write a letter to your landlord telling himWhy you are writing himWhy you are unable to pay your rentWhen you will be able to pay your rent v. 1
As the limited housing options come with different societal outcomes, some people believe that the government can find solutions to this situation. I agree with the statement because the government can make regulations and predict the circumstances in the coming years. As the lacking housing options are generally a collective problem rather than a local one, no individuals or institution can handle this pressing problem without the support of a government. Because, governments can regulate and authorise new laws. For instance, in the Netherlands housing options are limited, therefore the rents are getting higher as the demands get an increase. To solve this the Dutch government offers many rent waiver options those who live with a different generation in the same household. The reason for that, when people choose to live together the need for a housing has shown a significant decrease. Furthermore, the government is the right address to point out the housing system, since it has the authority to access a big data to see the prediction of changing numbers of housing needs statistically in the upcoming years. This development can guide the government by giving time to find varied solutions. For example, the Municipality of London recently has built a Data Department, which specifically works on the indication of the housing system in the city. According to the Major, this new office will help them to build new living areas before the need for them will rise. To conclude, not having limitless housing options brings societal problems and governments are the ones that need to find solutions for their citizens. This is not only because they can regulate new laws, but they also have access to the big data where they can predict the near future for this very situation, therefore, find new ways to tackle the issue.
As the limited housing
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come
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different
societal outcomes,
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some
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people
believe that the
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government
can
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find
solutions to this situation. I
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agree
with the statement
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because
the
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government
can
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make
regulations and predict the circumstances in the coming years.

As the lacking housing
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options
are
generally
a collective problem
rather
than a local one, no individuals or institution can handle this pressing problem without the support of a
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government
.
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Because
,
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governments
can regulate and
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authorise
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new
laws.
For instance
, in the Netherlands housing
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options
are limited
,
therefore
the rents are getting higher as the demands
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get
an increase. To solve this the Dutch
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government
offers
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many
rent waiver
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options
those who
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live
with a
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different
generation in the same household. The reason for that, when
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people
choose to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
together the
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need
for a housing has shown a significant decrease.

Furthermore
, the
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government
is the right address to point out the housing system, since it has the authority to access a
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big
data to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
the prediction of changing numbers of housing
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needs
statistically
in the upcoming years. This development can guide the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
by giving time to
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find
varied solutions.
For example
, the Municipality of London recently has built a Data Department, which
specifically
works on the indication of the housing system in the city. According to the Major, this
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new
office will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them to build
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new
living areas
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before
the
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need
for them will rise.

To conclude
, not having limitless housing
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options
brings societal problems and
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governments
are the ones that
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need
to
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find
solutions for their citizens. This is not
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only
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because
they can regulate
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new
laws,
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but
they
also
have access to the
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big
data where they can predict the near future for this
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very
situation,
therefore
,
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find
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new
ways to tackle the issue.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You are unable to pay your rent due to some financial problems you are facing. Write a letter to your landlord telling himWhy you are writing himWhy you are unable to pay your rentWhen you will be able to pay your rent v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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