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Your friend would like to visit your hometown Write a letter to him and say What is the best time of the year to visit your hometown Suggest some places to visit in your hometown Invite your friend to meet your family v.1

Your friend would like to visit your hometown Write a letter to him and say What is the best time of the year to visit your hometown Suggest some places to visit in your hometown Invite your friend to meet your family v. 1
Some people argue that it is pointless to spend money on the protection of wild animals because we humans have no need for them. I completely disagree with this point of view. In my opinion, it is absurd to argue that wild animals have no place in the 21st century. I do not believe that planet Earth exists only for the benefit of humans, and there is nothing special about this particular century that means that we suddenly have the right to allow or encourage the extinction of any species. Furthermore, there is no compelling reason why we should let animals die out. We do not need to exploit or destroy every last square metre of land in order to feed or accommodate the world’s population. There is plenty of room for us to exist side by side with wild animals, and this should be our aim. I disagree with the idea that protecting animals is a waste of resources. It is usually the protection of natural habitats that ensures the survival of wild animals, and most scientists agree that these habitats are crucial for human survival. For example, rainforests produce oxygen, absorb carbon dioxide and stabilise the Earth’s climate. If we destroyed these areas, the costs of managing the resulting changes to our planet would far outweigh the costs of conservation. By protecting wild animals and their habitats, we maintain the natural balance of all life on Earth. In conclusion, we have no right to decide whether or not wild animals should exist, and I believe that we should do everything we can to protect them. There are some who hold the opinion that gun ownership should be restricted, as it is in many countries, and that people in general should not be permitted to keep them. This is an opinion which can strongly be supported as will now be discussed.
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Some
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people
argue that it is pointless to spend money on the protection of wild
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
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because
we humans have no need for them. I completely disagree with this point of view.

In my opinion, it is absurd to argue that wild
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
have no place in the 21st century. I do not believe that planet Earth exists
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
for the benefit of humans, and there is nothing special about this particular century that means that we
suddenly
have the right to
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allow
or encourage the extinction of any species.
Furthermore
, there is no compelling reason why we should
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let
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animals
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
die
out. We do not need to exploit or
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destroy
every last square
Possible spelling mistake. 'metre' is British English.
metre
of land in order to feed or accommodate the world’s population. There is
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plenty
of room for us to exist side by side with wild
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animals
, and this should be our aim.

I disagree with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
that protecting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
is a waste of resources. It is
usually
the protection of natural habitats that ensures the survival of wild
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
, and most scientists
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agree
that these habitats are crucial for human survival.
For example
, rainforests produce oxygen, absorb carbon dioxide and
Possible spelling mistake. 'stabilise' is British English.
stabilise
the Earth’s climate. If we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
destroyed
these areas, the costs of managing the resulting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
to our planet would far outweigh the costs of conservation. By protecting wild
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
and their habitats, we maintain the natural balance of all life on Earth.

In conclusion
, we have no right to decide
Consider shortening this phrase to just "whether". It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
whether or not
wild
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
should exist, and I believe that we should do everything we can to protect them. There are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
who hold the opinion that gun ownership should
be restricted
, as it is in
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many
countries, and that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
in general
should not
be permitted
to
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keep
them. This is an opinion which can
strongly
be supported
as will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
be discussed
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Your friend would like to visit your hometown Write a letter to him and say What is the best time of the year to visit your hometown Suggest some places to visit in your hometown Invite your friend to meet your family v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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