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Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socialising with others. Do you agree or disagree? v.6

Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socialising with others. v. 6
Since Television has been invented, it serves the people for entertainment, news and various things. However, in some extent, people will get addicted by TV and its contents. I believe there would have positive and negative impacts. In this essay, we will look at both aspects with suitable examples. Firstly, in ancient times, people felt the difficulty of getting information from others. It came through either bird communication or word of mouth. Once Television was discovered, people get an information at their end and reacted accordingly. Moreover, TV live casting the events, screening the movies and songs, people seeing them and feel that they are entertained. For instance, a survey conducted by the BBC that, 50% of people across the globe learning new things by watching them in small screen. On the other hand, TV also provides contents in some extent like adult oriented, violence so people will see and get the negative signs by mimicking them particularly children. In addition, some people also get suffered from addiction of serials or other TV programmes. Thus, they ignore the day-to-day activities so it causes a significant effect on their lifestyles. To exemplify, a woman from Ireland, forgot her baby crying for food while watching TV. By the time, her husband came and see, had a serious conversation with them. To conclude, TV has both good and bad, so we should take them for good and consider for certain limits. Otherwise it leads to some unpleasant influences.
Since Television has
been invented
, it serves the
people
for entertainment, news and various things.
However
, in
some
extent,
people
will
get
addicted by TV and its contents. I believe there would have
positive
and
negative
impacts. In this essay, we will look at both aspects with suitable examples.

Firstly
, in ancient times,
people
felt the difficulty of getting information from others. It came through either bird communication or word of mouth. Once Television
was discovered
,
people
get
an information at their
end
and reacted
accordingly
.
Moreover
, TV
live
casting the
events
, screening the movies and songs,
people
seeing them and feel that they
are entertained
.
For instance
, a survey conducted by the BBC that, 50% of
people
across the globe learning new things by watching them in
small
screen.

On the other hand
, TV
also
provides contents in
some
extent like adult oriented, violence
so
people
will
see
and
get
the
negative
signs by mimicking them
particularly
children.
In addition
,
some
people
also
get
suffered from addiction of serials or other TV
programmes
.
Thus
, they
ignore
the day-to-day activities
so
it causes a significant effect on their lifestyles. To exemplify, a woman from Ireland, forgot her baby crying for food while watching TV. By the time, her husband came and
see
, had a serious conversation with them.

To conclude
, TV has both
good
and
bad
,
so
we should take them for
good
and consider for certain limits.
Otherwise
it leads to
some
unpleasant influences.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socialising with others. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
245 words
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7
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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