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Mass Tourism has a negative effect on a country and should be discouraged. To what extent do you agree and disagree with this statement? v.1

Mass Tourism has a negative effect on a country and should be discouraged. v. 1
It is being noticed that in today's world, humans have been producing more wastages than it used to be hundreds of years before. This is mainly because of the increased number of the overall world population as well as the usage of non-recyclable products. There are a number of solutions that should be followed in order to eliminate the amount of trash produced. Firstly, since the number of people increased worldwide, the amount of rubbish being produced in rising respectively, which is leading the environment into serious issues. In other words, as the amount of people on earth grows to 7 billion and expected to reach 9 billion by 2050, their waste will see a sharp incremental changes as well. Secondly, the usage of non-recyclable products plays a negative aspect in term of trash elimination, as such products will end up being thrown instead of recycled and reused. As a result, human wastages will keep on rising and the problem will just get worse. There are two effective solutions to the problem of rubbish increasing. One way to tackle the issue is by educating individuals on the dangerous this issue will bring to our environment if it continues to expand. For example, governments could have advertising banners installed along the highways and metro stations highlighting the downsides of the issue and its risks. Moreover, making use of modern technologies and social media, authorities can easily reach to the public and draw more attention towards the issue. Another method to deal with the problem is to eliminate the usage of non-recyclable products, which are a main contributor to the issue. This could be achieved by providing an easy access to recycling machines within the society, which will also give a tiny reward for each recycled item. By doing so, more and more people will be encouraged to use and rely on recycled products instead. In conclusion, educating the public about the risks associated with the waste rising as well as the encouragement of using recycled products are very effective solution when dealing with the human wastage issue. If governments followed the suggested approaches, rubbish production figure would soon drop.
It is
being noticed
that in
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today
's world, humans have been producing more
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wastages
than it
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used
to be hundreds of years
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before
. This is
mainly
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because
of the increased number of the
overall
world population
as well
as the usage of non-recyclable
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products
. There are a number of solutions that should
be followed
in order to eliminate the amount of trash produced.

Firstly
, since the number of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
increased worldwide, the amount of rubbish
being produced
in rising
respectively
, which is leading the environment into serious
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issues
.
In other words
, as the amount of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
on earth grows to 7 billion and
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expected
to reach 9 billion by 2050, their waste will
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see
a sharp incremental
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changes
as well
.
Secondly
, the usage of non-recyclable
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products
plays a
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negative
aspect in term of trash elimination, as such
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products
will
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end
up
being thrown
instead
of
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recycled
and reused.
As a result
, human
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wastages
will
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keep
on rising and the problem will
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just
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get
worse.

There are two effective solutions to the problem of rubbish increasing. One way to tackle the
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issue
is by educating individuals on the
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dangerous
this
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issue
will bring to our environment if it continues to expand.
For example
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
could have advertising banners installed along the highways and metro stations highlighting the downsides of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
issue
and its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risks
.
Moreover
, making
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of modern technologies and social media, authorities can
easily
reach to the public and draw more attention towards the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
issue
. Another method to deal with the problem is to eliminate the usage of non-recyclable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
, which are a main contributor to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
issue
. This could
be achieved
by providing
Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "easy access".
an easy access
to recycling machines within the society, which will
also
give a tiny reward for each
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
recycled
item. By doing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
, more and more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
will
be encouraged
to
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use
and rely on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
recycled
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
instead
.

In conclusion
, educating the public about the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risks
associated with the waste rising
as well
as the encouragement of using
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
recycled
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
effective solution when dealing with the human wastage
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
issue
. If
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
followed the suggested approaches, rubbish production figure would
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
drop.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Mass Tourism has a negative effect on a country and should be discouraged. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
358 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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