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Talk about your hometown. You should say: - Where the most crowded area in your hometown is - What your advice is for someone intending to visit your hometown - How you see your hometown growing in the next 20 years. v.2

Talk about your hometown. You should say: - Where the most crowded area in your hometown is - What your advice is for someone intending to visit your hometown - How you see your hometown growing in the next 20 years. v. 2
Reducing the number of languages were used in the global happen every year. Many people opine that this is not important because life will be easier if several languages die out. This essay agrees that if the world has fewer languages, doing business and education will be easier. Initially, The globalization of business is easier because people use a world language. A world language is few languages that used by a lot of people in the world. If have a small number of languages, people can communicate and trade easier. For example, when I purchase something from China, this easier to contact with a supplier who can use the English language more than a supplier who communicate only Chinese language. It is easy to communicate with other people who can use the same language. Additionally, fewer language is also better for education. If the world has only one language, learning a foreign language is not necessary anymore. When people memo knowledges in few languages, people can learn easier. Education in Thailand, for instance, Thailand has many local accents that very different, but Thai people have a national language for education. This makes Thai people can read all Thai language books. It is easier for learning when people use a national language to replace local accents. In conclusion, a language that dies out because people do not use it, so this is not important if have fewer languages in the world. I am convinced life will be better when having fewer language because people can do business and learn easier.
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languages
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, doing business and
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education
will be easier.

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easier
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because
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people
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people
can communicate and trade
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.
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, when I
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purchase
something from China, this
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easier
to contact with a supplier who can
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use
the English
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language
more than a supplier who communicate
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only
Chinese
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language
. It is easy to communicate with other
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use
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education
. If the
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, learning a foreign
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,
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.
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Thai
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have a national
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for
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people
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books. It is
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a national
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language
to replace local accents.

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. I
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language
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can do business and learn
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Talk about your hometown. You should say: - Where the most crowded area in your hometown is - What your advice is for someone intending to visit your hometown - How you see your hometown growing in the next 20 years. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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