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You visited a town last month and told your friend that you would like to meet. However you could not make it. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, you should: express your apologywhy you could not meetmaking arrangement to meet him v.1

You visited a town last month and told your friend that you would like to meet. However you could not make it. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, you should: express your apologywhy you could not meetmaking arrangement to meet him v. 1
As a government of a country, it should take correct decisions on time in order to drive the country towards country towards to the success. The financial growth is considered as the top most aim of the many authorities. However, there are other areas which have to show progress as a nation. In this essay I will explain how the financial growth involves improvements in other areas. Firstly, it is worth that to draw the consideration on why a nation has to aim its economic progress as the first point? There should be a stable economy to face problems which have to be faced unexpectedly in the future. As an example, the Flood, bush fires, drought, Tsunami kind of disasters can happen without predicting early. Not only that man-made disasters like wars, medical attacks such as virus spreading purposely can be experienced in the future which no one can predict early. Hence the economic progress is essential to maintain the financial stability to face these issues without failing. Secondly, are there any other progresses a country should be obtained? In fact, there are plenty of areas which government has to pay attention on corresponding to the growth of the economy. They are infrastructure, health, culture, agriculture and so on. Let’s discuss how government can improve these areas. In order to uplift infrastructure, money is needed. It is obvious that other types also need money to improve its quality. Because money stands before than all types for progresses. That means authorities must focus on the progress of the economy than anything. In conclusion If a country does not take the economic progress as its most focused point, then the other areas cannot be improved respectively. In that case, the whole system will fail in front of the eyes of the society.
As a
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government
of a
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country
, it should take correct decisions on time in order to drive the
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country
towards
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country
towards to the success. The financial growth
is considered
as the top most aim of the
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many
authorities.
However
, there are
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other
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areas
which
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have to
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show
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progress
as a nation. In this essay I will
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explain
how the financial growth involves improvements in
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other
areas.

Firstly
, it is worth that to draw the consideration on why a nation
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has to
aim its economic
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progress
as the
first
point? There should be a stable economy to face problems which
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have to
be faced
unexpectedly
in the future. As an example, the Flood, bush fires, drought, Tsunami kind of disasters can happen without predicting early. Not
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only
that
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man
-made disasters like wars, medical attacks such as virus spreading
purposely
can
be experienced
in the future which no one can predict early.
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Hence
the economic
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progress
is essential to maintain the financial stability to face these issues without failing.

Secondly
, are there any
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other
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progresses
a
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country
should
be obtained
? In fact, there are
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plenty
of
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areas
which
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government
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has to
pay attention on corresponding to the growth of the economy. They are infrastructure, health, culture, agriculture and
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so
on.
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Let
’s discuss how
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government
can
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improve
these
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areas
. In order to uplift infrastructure, money
is needed
. It is obvious that
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other
types
also
need money to
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improve
its quality.
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Because
money stands
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before
than all types for
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progresses
. That means authorities
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must
focus on the
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progress
of the economy than anything.

In conclusion
If a
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country
does not take the economic
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progress
as its most focused point, then the
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other
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areas
cannot be
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improved
respectively
.
In that case
, the whole system will fail in front of the eyes of the society.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay You visited a town last month and told your friend that you would like to meet. However you could not make it. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, you should: express your apologywhy you could not meetmaking arrangement to meet him v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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