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Your friend is having anxiety and stress at night before taking all of his/her tests. What would you suggest to your friend to do that could alleviate his/her anxiety the night before tests? v.1

Your friend is having anxiety and stress at night before taking all of his/her tests. What would you suggest to your friend to do that could alleviate his/her anxiety the night before tests? v. 1
In today’s world, Some advertisement implements unethical and improper methods to promote products and increase profits. In my opinion I strongly agree with this view and In this essay we will look into some of the methods organization follow in detail. Falsely boosted product advantages to make people believe they are superior. Marketing improperly promote products as having huge advantages compared to the competitor product without proper backing with facts. For instance, to increase sales, the product advantages are significantly boosted than the actual advantage. One clear example is flavoured water, Which is increasing promoted as a better alternative to regular water. In fact, research has shown that they do not achieve any significant health benefits compared to regular water. Companies regularly fund scientific research that results in a favourable outcome for their products. In fact, there are situations where companies did not publish the result of the research since the outcome was not in their favour. For example, The research on the health benefits of cocoa in chocolates. Though cocoa has some benefits the quantity that needs to be consumed to achieve the benefits is significantly larger than few grams which is available in chocolate. However, chocolate manufactures forecast the benefits to be huge and down play the quantity required to achieve it and other unhealthy ingredients in their product. In conclusion, I strongly believe that there are some advertisements that uses immoral and unacceptable tactics in current societies. This is done mainly to boost the sales and profit margin of the company without considering the impact on the general population. In future government should have stricter guidelines and rules to curb false advertisements and impose stricter penalties.
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today
’s world,
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Some
advertisement implements unethical and improper methods to promote
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products
and increase profits. In my opinion I
strongly
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agree
with this view and In this essay we will look into
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methods
organization follow in detail.

Falsely
boosted
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product
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advantages
to
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make
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people
believe they are superior. Marketing
improperly
promote
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products
as having huge
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advantages
compared to the competitor
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product
without proper backing with facts.
For instance
, to increase sales, the
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product
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advantages
are
significantly
boosted than the actual
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advantage
. One
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clear
example is
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flavoured
water, Which is increasing promoted as a better alternative to regular water. In fact,
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research
has shown that they do not achieve any significant health
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benefits
compared to regular water.

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Companies
regularly
fund scientific
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research
that results in a
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favourable
outcome for their
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products
. In fact, there are situations where
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companies
did not publish the result of the
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research
since the outcome was not in their
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favour
.
For example
, The
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research
on the health
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benefits
of cocoa in chocolates.
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Though
cocoa has
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some
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benefits
the quantity that needs to
be consumed
to achieve the
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benefits
is
significantly
larger than few grams which is available in chocolate.
However
, chocolate manufactures forecast the
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benefits
to be huge and down play the quantity required to achieve it and other unhealthy ingredients in their product.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
believe that there are
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some
advertisements that
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uses
immoral and unacceptable tactics in
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current
societies. This
is done
mainly
to boost the sales and profit margin of the
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company
without considering the impact on the general population. In future
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government
should have stricter guidelines and
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rules
to curb false advertisements and impose stricter penalties.
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IELTS essay Your friend is having anxiety and stress at night before taking all of his/her tests. What would you suggest to your friend to do that could alleviate his/her anxiety the night before tests? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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