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Tpo 49 q4 Explain how the example from the lecture illustrates the concept of procedural memory v.1

Tpo 49 q4 Explain how the example from the lecture illustrates the concept of procedural memory v. 1
In today’s world, there is an ongoing debate which suggests whether all university students should study whatever they want or they should be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future. Although there are both advantages and disadvantages, either way, it is widely accepted that students should study whatever they like. First of all, when choosing a subject at university students should be aware of both the advantages and disadvantages of that subject. One advantage is that studying whatever they like could be less stressful and more fun. Moreover, students could be more successful in the chosen subject since they like it. According to researches that put in effort recently, students who prefer to study what they like at universities become more successful in their future life and live a healthier life. Therefore, I believe that students should pursue a path that they feel happy with it. However, there may be fewer job opportunities after graduation due to the low demand for that particular subject on the market. Secondly, there are also both advantages and disadvantages related to studying subjects that will be useful in the future. Unlike studying whatever we like, studying a subject that will be beneficial in the future not only for the students, but also for the employers could help a student find a job much more easily after graduation. A lot of researches that has been made on this topic supports the idea that studying a subject that could be useful in the future, such as science and technology will increase the chances of getting hired after graduation and the salaries of these jobs will be much higher. On the other hand, since there is a high level of competition when it comes to getting a job, newly graduated students might feel worried about their future and get stressed. Besides, students may not be satisfied with their subject and which could lead to a disastrous mental problem. In conclusion, it is still argued that whether a student should study a subject that they like most or they should prefer subjects that will be useful in the future. In my opinion, happiness is the most important matter in our lives. Therefore, I hold the idea that students should study whatever they like.
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students
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whatever
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want or
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allowed
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study
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subjects
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useful
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future
. Although there are both
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advantages
and disadvantages, either way, it is
widely
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accepted
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students
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whatever
they like.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, when choosing a
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subject
at university
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students
should be aware of both the
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advantages
and disadvantages of that
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subject
. One
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advantage
is that
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studying
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whatever
they like could be less stressful and more fun.
Moreover
,
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students
could be more successful in the chosen
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subject
since they like it. According to researches that put in effort recently,
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students
who prefer to
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study
what they like at universities become more successful in their
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future
life and
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live
a healthier life.
Therefore
, I believe that
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students
should pursue a path that they feel happy with it.
However
, there may be fewer
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job
opportunities after graduation due to the low demand for that particular
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subject
on the market.

Secondly
, there are
also
both
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advantages
and disadvantages related to
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studying
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subjects
that will be
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useful
in the
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future
. Unlike
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studying
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whatever
we like,
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studying
a
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subject
that will be beneficial in the
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future
not
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only
for the
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students
,
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also
for the employers could
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help
a
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student
find a
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job
much more
easily
after graduation.
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A lot of
researches that has
been made
on this topic supports the
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idea
that
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studying
a
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subject
that could be
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useful
in the
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future
, such as science and technology will increase the chances of getting hired after graduation and the salaries of these
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jobs
will be much higher.
On the other hand
, since there is a high level of competition when it
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comes
to getting a
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job
,
newly
graduated
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students
might feel worried about their
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future
and
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.
Besides
,
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may not
be satisfied
with their
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and which could lead to a disastrous mental problem.

In conclusion
, it is
still
argued that whether a
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student
should
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study
a
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subject
that they like
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most or
they should prefer
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subjects
that will be
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useful
in the
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future
. In my opinion, happiness is the most
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important
matter in our
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.
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that
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whatever
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Tpo 49 q4 Explain how the example from the lecture illustrates the concept of procedural memory v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
379 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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