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256. Your friend is having anxiety and stress at night before taking all of his/her tests. What would you suggest to your friend to do that could alleviate his/her anxiety the night before tests? v.1

256. Your friend is having anxiety and stress at night before taking all of his/her tests. What would you suggest to your friend to do that could alleviate his/her anxiety the night before tests? v. 1
Overpopulation has always been a topic of concern for metropolitan cities. With the provision of better facilities and more job opportunities, we have only seen an exponential climb in the amount of people migrating to urban areas. This essay discusses some of the pain points of overpopulation on urban areas, and also dives into a couple of ways which government can combat this issue with suitable measures. There are two problems which arise due to overpopulation; housing issues and water scarcity. With cities stretching the boundaries to provide housing for people to reside, it is only inevitable that we will see a day where we see the platforms and bus stops littered with people. This has already started to manifest itself in certain parts of India. For instance, an article by a news agency said that 20% of the country has already been deemed homeless. Furthermore, water has also been a major problem for a couple of decades. With population only slated to increase in the forthcoming years, this problem will only worsen. There have already been reports of water scarcity in some major cities. For example, the recent issue with water scarcity in Chennai had a very profound impact on daily life. There was no water to even take a bath, and the effects spilled over to affect even the daily functioning of offices as well. Given the issues, Government and individuals can implement suitable measures to neutralize the consequences. Although it may take ages for curtailing overpopulation completely, the logical first step towards battling it is to enforce certain rules. A good example of a proper scheme is the one kid per family rule. As far as housing is concerned, there is a gargantuan need to come up with really innovative and optimized floor plans and houses. Dihydrogen oxide scarcity can be handled by individuals taking initiative to set up rainwater harvesting mechanisms. Additionally, the government can also facilitate awareness drives for citizens to be more aware of the situation and the steps to make the future better. In conclusion, this essay discussed the adverse effects of overpopulation in urban areas. We also looked at some courses of action which the government can take to control the exponentially growing problem, and also prevent it from manifesting again.
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Overpopulation
has always been a topic of concern for metropolitan cities. With the provision of better facilities and more job opportunities, we have
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only
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seen
an exponential climb in the amount of
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people
migrating to urban areas. This essay discusses
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some of the
pain points of
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overpopulation
on urban areas, and
also
dives into a couple of ways which
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government
can combat this
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issue
with suitable measures.

There are two
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problems
which arise due to
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overpopulation
; housing
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issues
and
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water
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scarcity
. With cities stretching the boundaries to provide housing for
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people
to reside, it is
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only
inevitable that we will
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see
a
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day where
we
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see
the platforms and bus
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stops
littered with
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people
. This has already
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started
to manifest itself in certain parts of India.
For instance
, an article by a news agency said that 20% of the country has already
been deemed
homeless.
Furthermore
,
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water
has
also
been a major
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problem
for a couple of decades. With population
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only
slated to increase in the forthcoming years, this
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problem
will
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only
worsen. There have already been reports of
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water
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scarcity
in
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some
major cities.
For example
, the recent
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issue
with
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water
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scarcity
in Chennai had a
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very
profound impact on daily life. There was no
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water
to even take a bath, and the effects spilled over to affect even the daily functioning of offices
as well
.

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Given
the
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issues
,
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Government
and individuals can implement suitable measures to neutralize the consequences. Although it may take ages for curtailing
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overpopulation
completely, the logical
first
step towards battling it is to enforce certain
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rules
. A
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good
example of a proper scheme is the one kid per family
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rule
. As far as housing
is concerned
, there is a gargantuan need to
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come
up with
really
innovative and optimized floor plans and
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houses
.
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Dihydrogen
oxide
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scarcity
can
be handled
by individuals taking initiative to set up rainwater harvesting mechanisms.
Additionally
, the
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government
can
also
facilitate awareness drives for citizens to be more aware of the situation and the steps to
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make
the future better.

In conclusion
, this essay discussed the adverse effects of
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overpopulation
in urban areas. We
also
looked at
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some
courses of action which the
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government
can take to control the
exponentially
growing
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problem
, and
also
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prevent
it from manifesting again.
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IELTS essay 256. Your friend is having anxiety and stress at night before taking all of his/her tests. What would you suggest to your friend to do that could alleviate his/her anxiety the night before tests? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
379 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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