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Although most people are richer than in the past, modern life seems very stressful, and the number of people suffering from stress is at record levels. What are the main causes of stress in modern life, and how could stress be reduced? v.1

Although most people are richer than in the past, modern life seems very stressful, and the number of people suffering from stress is at record levels. What are the main causes of stress in modern life, and how could stress be reduced? v. 1
Nowadays life is becoming more stressful than in the past. Today, the number of aggressive people has risen by 60% since 2006. I think it is important to prevent it because stress can cause a number of diseases. In this essay, I will illustrate some reason and efficient solutions for them. One of the main causes of the problem is that people come across work challenges. Most people are snowed under paperwork and don't have enough time to relax. For instance, people who work in an office are required to prepare exhausting reports. Sometimes they can't finish it on time, so they have to stay after work to complete up. To address this issue, employers should pay more attention to the free time of employees. If employees are free, they can be more creative, that it will help a company to develop. Another problem is that we daily hear about violence and terrorism from the news. This can make people themselves more feel insecure. For example, journalists every day publish about terrorism in newspapers, magazines and make interviews, which is followed by millions of people around the world. To tackle this issue, the media should stop publishing bad news. There is a lot of great news, in our world, that not everyone knows. A third cause of the problem is job insecurity that can make people more stressful. As a result, if an organization has a contract with employees for one year, at the end of the contract workers will start to worry. The way forward could be to cancel contracts and give freedom to employees to think out of the box. It can help to work by heart. All in all, stressful people are everywhere, due to reasons such as the work challenge, terrorism, and job insecurity. This is a serious problem that must be solved immediately. In my view, people don't have to take everything close to heart, otherwise, stress can create disease.
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prevent
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because
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stress
can cause a number of diseases. In this essay, I will illustrate
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some
reason and efficient solutions for them.

One of the main causes of the
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problem
is that
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people
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come
across
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work
challenges. Most
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people
are snowed
under paperwork and don't have
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enough
time to relax.
For instance
,
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people
who
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work
in an office
are required
to prepare exhausting reports.
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Sometimes
they can't finish it on time,
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so
they
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have to
stay after
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work
to complete up. To address this issue, employers should pay more attention to the free time of
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employees
. If
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employees
are free, they can be more creative, that it will
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help
a
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company
to develop.

Another
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problem
is that we daily hear about violence and terrorism from the news. This can
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make
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people
themselves more feel insecure.
For example
, journalists every day publish about terrorism in newspapers, magazines and
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make
interviews, which
is followed
by millions of
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people
around the world. To tackle this issue, the media should
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stop
publishing
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bad
news. There is
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a lot of
great news, in our world, that not everyone knows.

A third cause of the
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problem
is job insecurity that can
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make
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people
more stressful.
As a result
, if an organization has a contract with
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employees
for one year, at the
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end
of the contract workers will
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start
to worry. The way forward could be to cancel contracts and give freedom to
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employees
to
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think
out of the box. It can
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help
to
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work
by heart.

All in all, stressful
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people
are everywhere, due to reasons such as the
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work
challenge, terrorism, and job insecurity. This is a serious
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problem
that
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must
be solved
immediately. In my view,
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people
don't
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have to
take everything close to heart,
otherwise
,
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stress
can create disease.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Although most people are richer than in the past, modern life seems very stressful, and the number of people suffering from stress is at record levels. What are the main causes of stress in modern life, and how could stress be reduced? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
325 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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