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Your friend has asked you about the course details you recently did in a training centre. Explain about the course details, why should your friend take this course and how has the course benefitted you. v.1

Your friend has asked you about the course details you recently did in a training centre. Explain about the course details, why should your friend take this course and how has the course benefitted you. v. 1
Crime rate is proliferated across the world. Many individuals opine that Rigid-penalties for any sort of atrocity is necessary. Although there is a Scope for misusing the laws with this Idea, misdeed rate can be controlled and Aid to crime free society. There is plethora of benefits by having fixed punishments. First and foremost, the outcome will be the decrease in misconduct rate. People tend to panic with the implementation of rigid laws that made them to think twice before committing a misconduct. However, we should not forget the role of public awareness programmes, which educate the people about the charges and offence in a more efficient way that, eventually build crime free society. For instance, countries such as India, Pakistan are more prone to gruesome rapes. These countries have restructured their laws in a way to eradicate molestations has worked out tremendously and brought a drastic change in the crime rate. However, there are other challenges associated with fixed punishments. People can misuse the law by utilising the loop holes. People will be more prone to the misinterpretation of Penalised actions. For instance, Indian jurisdiction has introduced a new legislation to eradicate domestic violence on women has been called off within no time due to the fact that women are more prone to blackmail their spouses in the name of adverse effects with that law. In conclusion, Implementation of laws has been always a debatable topic. Some people often believe that Strict and fixed Punishments are imperative. Although that is prone to the misusage of law, could be helpful in declining the crime rate and lead to a crime free society.
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Crime
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rate
is proliferated
across the world.
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Many
individuals opine that Rigid-penalties for any sort of atrocity is necessary. Although there is a Scope for misusing the
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laws
with this
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Idea
, misdeed
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rate
can
be controlled
and Aid to
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crime
free society.

There is plethora of benefits by having
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fixed
punishments.
First
and foremost, the outcome will be the decrease in misconduct
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rate
.
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People
tend to panic with the implementation of rigid
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laws
that made them to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
twice
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before
committing a misconduct.
However
, we should not forget the role of public awareness
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programmes
, which educate the
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people
about the charges and
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offence
in a more efficient way that,
eventually
build
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crime
free society.
For instance
, countries such as India, Pakistan are more prone to gruesome rapes. These countries have restructured their
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laws
in a way to eradicate
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molestations
has worked out
tremendously
and brought a drastic
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change
in the
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crime
rate.

However
, there are other challenges associated with
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fixed
punishments.
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People
can misuse the
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law
by
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utilising
the loop holes.
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People
will be more prone to the misinterpretation of
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Penalised
actions.
For instance
, Indian jurisdiction has introduced a new legislation to eradicate domestic violence on women has
been called
off within no time due to the fact that women are more prone to blackmail their spouses in the name of adverse effects with that law.

In conclusion
, Implementation of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laws
has been always a debatable topic.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
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people
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
believe that Strict and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fixed
Punishments are imperative. Although
that is
prone to the
Possible spelling mistake found.
misusage
of
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law
, could be helpful in declining the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
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rate
and lead to a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
free society.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Your friend has asked you about the course details you recently did in a training centre. Explain about the course details, why should your friend take this course and how has the course benefitted you. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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