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Write a Letter to your friend who also happens to live in that countrytell him/her why you chose this countrydescribe your new place of residencepropose a meeting with your friendbegin your letter with dear v.1

Write a Letter to your friend who also happens to live in that countrytell him/her why you chose this countrydescribe your new place of residencepropose a meeting with your friendbegin your letter with dear v. 1
In this essay I will outline a number of difficulties and possible solutions regarding flow-out of qualified specialists from impoverished countries to the more prosperous. The first problem is that life in poor countries becomes even worse when the most skilled people are leaving it. Let’s take the teachers as an example. When the most qualified of them immigrate to other countries those who are left have less experience so they probably teach worse, which in turn leads to gradually decreasing quality of education in the country. One of the possible solutions I can see is to increase their wellbeing. The government can increase salaries for them, decrease taxes and provide different kinds of social insurance. Even less percent for the mortgage can work. The second problem is oversaturation of the professionals in the market those specialists are immigrating to. For example, there was some research that showed that every third taxi driver in Toronto, Canada has an MBA or Master’s degree in Engineering. To solve this problem the immigration services of the receiving party should pick more precisely which occupations are in demand so they can stay in their field where they can be of use. Everybody will benefit when engineers will construct something and doctors cure diseases, but not drive a cab. People will always be seeking better lives for them and their families so the governments of both types of countries should take it into consideration and improve the rules and regulations for those who want to stay and those who want to leave.
In this essay I will outline a number of difficulties and possible solutions regarding flow-out of qualified specialists from impoverished
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countries
to the more prosperous.

The
first
problem is that life in poor
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countries
becomes even worse when the most skilled
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people
are leaving it.
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Let
’s take the teachers as an example. When the most qualified of them immigrate to other
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countries
those who are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
have less experience
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so
they
probably
teach worse, which in turn leads to
gradually
decreasing quality of education in the
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country
. One of the possible solutions I can
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see
is to increase their
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wellbeing
. The
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government
can increase salaries for them, decrease taxes and provide
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different
kinds of social insurance. Even less percent for the mortgage can work.

The second problem is
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oversaturation
of the professionals in the market those specialists are immigrating to.
For example
, there was
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some
research that
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showed
that every third taxi driver in Toronto, Canada has an MBA or Master’s degree in Engineering. To solve this problem the immigration services of the receiving party should pick more
precisely
which occupations are in demand
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
they can stay in their field where they can be of
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use
. Everybody will benefit when engineers will construct something and doctors cure diseases,
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but
not drive a cab.

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People
will always be seeking better
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lives
for them and their families
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so
the
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governments
of both types of
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countries
should take it into consideration and
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improve
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
and regulations for those who want to stay and those who want to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Write a Letter to your friend who also happens to live in that countrytell him/her why you chose this countrydescribe your new place of residencepropose a meeting with your friendbegin your letter with dear v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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