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Some people think people are responsible for a solution to pollution made by transportation and other think government are. Discuss both views and give your own opinion v.1

Some people think people are responsible for a solution to pollution made by transportation and other think government are. 1
Numerous people argue that the only result to guarantee getting a good occupation to archive a course of educational institution, particularly in college. There are those who claim that there is another choice for having worked after school that can obtain experience in the global work. Personally, I partially agree that people who graduate the university always have good jobs. The supporting reasons will be given throughout this essay. There are some crucial reasons why some groups of certain people success in their life. The initial matter to be mentioned that is capable, it brings about the profession. Due to the fact that certain workers, mostly graduated the university, it possibly guarantee of employers to choose them. A clear illustration is that having the high position need to have high degrees and well-profile. This action impacts on there are a variety of job application’s types, leading to avoiding unemployed. Despite completing the university, there are some arguments that a famous person who never went to college, but he has sums of salary and various experiences. It is not the only way to confirm that people who finished the college might get a good career. Due to the reason that I mentioned, Steve job who improves the innovative technology or IT, particularly Apple organization. Additionally, he aims to use imagination more than knowledge and using life skills. His capability like intelligent person. He figures out the problem by themselves and try to challenge things which reward to the people’ need, such as iPhone, iPad and others. It contributes to the famous logo on the globalisation. In conclusion, Both views have obvious different results, so it is clear that people always not lucky or have special abilities since they born. As a suggestion, the diplomacy from educational institution might guarantee the status of people and having various choices for themselves.
Numerous
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people
argue that the
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only
result to guarantee getting a
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occupation to archive a course of educational institution,
particularly
in college. There are those
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who
claim that there is another choice for having worked after school that can obtain experience in the global work.
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, I
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agree
that
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people
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who
graduate the university always have
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good
jobs. The supporting reasons will be
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given
throughout this essay.

There are
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some
crucial reasons why
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some
groups of certain
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people
success in their life. The initial matter to
be mentioned
that is
capable, it brings about the profession. Due to the fact that certain workers,
mostly
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graduated
the university, it
possibly
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guarantee
of employers to choose them. A
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clear
illustration is that having the high position need to have high degrees and well-profile. This action impacts on there are a variety of job application’s types, leading to avoiding unemployed.

Despite completing the university, there are
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some
arguments that a
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famous
person
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who
never went to college,
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but
he has sums of salary and various experiences. It is not the
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only
way to confirm that
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people
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who
finished the college might
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get
a
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good
career. Due to the reason that I mentioned, Steve job
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who
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improves
the innovative technology or IT,
particularly
Apple organization.
Additionally
, he aims to
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use
imagination more than knowledge and using life
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skills
. His capability like intelligent person. He figures out the problem by themselves and try to challenge things which reward to the
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people’
need, such as iPhone, iPad
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and others
. It contributes to the
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famous
logo on the
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globalisation
.

In conclusion
, Both views have obvious
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different
results,
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so
it is
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clear
that
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people
always not lucky or have special abilities since they born. As a suggestion, the diplomacy from educational institution might guarantee the status of
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people
and having various choices for themselves.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think people are responsible for a solution to pollution made by transportation and other think government are. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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