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The company you work for is planning to provide special training for staff. Your duty is to find out if the local conference centre has suitable facilities in order to hold the training. Write a letter to the manager of the conference centre. In your l v.1

The company you work for is planning to provide special training for staff. Your duty is to find out if the local conference centre has suitable facilities in order to hold the training. Write a letter to the manager of the conference centre. In your l v. 1
Some people argue that it is impossible for developing countries to further develop without damaging the environment. In their opinion, economic growth should be the first priority of the government. I do not agree with this view. In my opinion, economic growth is important, but it cannot be at the expense of the environment. To commence with, when nations develop, they will require more resources. For example, developing countries like India and China need more fuel to power their growth. To explain, excessive consumption of fossil fuels, unfortunately, leads to the emission of carbon dioxide and accelerates the rate of global warming. Countries could better handle this problem if they start developing sustainable sources of energy. Another point to consider is that, all countries should invest in green and clean energy sources. For example, in nations lying on either side of the equator there is considerable potential for harnessing solar energy. Countries that produce excess amount of green energy can sell it to other countries. Rich nations that are technologically and scientifically more advanced should share the newer and greener technologies with poor and developing nations for a better tomorrow. Finally, Environmental problems are not limited to any particular country and it is foolish to claim that only those nations that pollute should do something about it. Before long, the impact of pollution caused by rapidly developing nations will also be felt in the developed world. To conclude, since our survival depends on the environment, we cannot ignore environmental problems on the pretext that they are a byproduct of development. Of course, there is a need for development, but it is time we said no to developing nations will also be felt in the developed world.
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Some
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people
argue that it is impossible for
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developing
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countries
to
further
develop without damaging the environment. In their opinion, economic growth should be the
first
priority of the
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government
. I do not
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agree
with this view. In my opinion, economic growth is
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important
,
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but
it cannot be at the expense of the environment.

To commence with, when
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nations
develop, they will require more resources.
For example
,
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developing
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countries
like India and China need more fuel to power their growth. To
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explain
, excessive consumption of fossil fuels, unfortunately, leads to the emission of carbon dioxide and accelerates the rate of global warming.
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Countries
could better handle this problem if they
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start
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developing
sustainable sources of energy.

Another point to consider is that, all
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countries
should invest in green and clean energy sources.
For example
, in
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nations
lying on either side of the equator there is considerable potential for harnessing solar energy.
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Countries
that produce excess amount of green energy can sell it to other
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countries
. Rich
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nations
that are
technologically
and
scientifically
more advanced should share the newer and greener technologies with poor and
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developing
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nations
for a better tomorrow.

Finally
, Environmental problems are not limited to any particular
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country
and it is foolish to claim that
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only
those
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nations
that pollute should do something about it.
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Before
long, the impact of pollution caused by
rapidly
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developing
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nations
will
also
be felt
in the developed world.

To conclude
, since our survival depends on the environment, we cannot
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignore
environmental problems on the pretext that they are a byproduct of development.
Of course
, there is a need for development,
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but
it is time we said no to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
developing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
will
also
be felt
in the developed world.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay The company you work for is planning to provide special training for staff. Your duty is to find out if the local conference centre has suitable facilities in order to hold the training. Write a letter to the manager of the conference centre. In your l v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
286 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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