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you recently did a short course. the cooekery school has asked for your feedback on this course. write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter DESCRIBE WHAT you enjoyed about the course say how much cooking you have done since v.2

you recently did a short course. the cooekery school has asked for your feedback on this course. write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter DESCRIBE WHAT you enjoyed about the course say how much cooking you have done since v. 2
In this present scenario, we are living in the musical era, where rap has spread its legs in every nook and corner of the world. Singing plays quite an indispensable role in everyone's life. It is observed that opera is a potent method of bringing people together from different cultures and ages. As far as, my opinion is concerned that, I completely agree with the given statement for many reasons. Undoubtedly, singing has several benefits, but most older people do not listen to the singing, due to some health and age problems such as low hearing problem. To cite an example, if someone has not healthy, strong, one can get frustrated easily from a piece which can lead more negative consequences. Nevertheless, there are some advantages of melody. Firstly, with the help of tune one can learn different cultures of different nations by mobile phone and other modern devices with the help of internet. As a consequence, it can help people to gain knowledge as well as improve their listening skills. Therefore, rap is the best source of entertainment in these days. Furthermore, opera is the best way of bringing people together over the world. Nowadays, the trend of live concerts is boosting day by day. Adding to it, every country organizes various events on special occasion such as new year, which is the best opportunity to connect with different people who belongs different cultures and ages during events. As a result, it can enable masses to make new friends and increase their social network. In conclusion, the soul is more efficient in bringing an audience together from different places over the world. However, it's also a powerful way for people to break the monotony of everyday life.
In this present scenario, we are living in the musical era, where rap has spread its legs in every nook and corner of the world. Singing plays quite an indispensable role in everyone's life. It
is observed
that opera is a potent method of bringing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
together from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
different
cultures and ages. As far as, my opinion
is concerned
that, I completely
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agree
with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
statement for
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many
reasons.

Undoubtedly
, singing has several benefits,
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but
Use only "older" (without 'most') when you use the comparative.
most older
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people
do not listen to the singing, due to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
health and age problems such as low hearing problem. To cite an example, if someone has not healthy, strong, one can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
frustrated
easily
from a piece which can lead more
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
consequences.

Nevertheless
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
advantages of melody.
Firstly
, with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of tune one can learn
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different
cultures of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
different
nations by mobile phone and other modern devices with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of internet. As a consequence, it can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
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people
to gain knowledge
as well
as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
their listening
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.
Therefore
, rap is the best source of entertainment in these days.

Furthermore
, opera is the best way of bringing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
together over the world. Nowadays, the trend of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
concerts is boosting day by day. Adding to it, every country organizes various
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
on special occasion such as new year, which is the best opportunity to connect with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who
Did you mean "belong"? Alternatively, check whether the singular of 'people' should be used.
belongs
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
different
cultures and ages during
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
.
As a result
, it can enable masses to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
new friends and increase their social network.

In conclusion
, the soul is more efficient in bringing an audience together from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
different
places over the world.
However
, it's
also
a powerful way for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to break the monotony of everyday life.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay you recently did a short course. the cooekery school has asked for your feedback on this course. write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter DESCRIBE WHAT you enjoyed about the course say how much cooking you have done since v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
288 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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