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Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure centre that it runs, in order to save money. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter • give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre • explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community • describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes v.1

Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure centre that it runs, in order to save money. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter • give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre • explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community • describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes v. 1
Dear Sir/Madam, Greetings to the day! ! ! ! I would like to share in our locality peoples feelings due to closing a sports and leisure public centre. We have been utilising this public centre since 2011, while using the tennis with neighbours at evening time. These collaborations have been such a wonderful experience with them for children and adults, senior citizens too. During summer we associated with kids' activities often. Food distribution, Old clothes distribution had been provided by the neighbourhood people if there is any occasion in Leisure centre. Especially, Games and motivated centre are providing physical fitness and mental health for residence. We lucky to get this council for many years. In addition, we gain a lot of friends and well wishers than Senior citizens give their suggestions that will be useful to us in personal life how to lead a life with patients. At evening hour playing a sport that could be given such a relief and get entertainment with family also. Further more spend some hour knowledge sharing in all subjects. We heard for the purpose of this closing, saving money, if it is specific reason we all are ready to pay some amount, while we using the local centre then you can save little bit money. For example: going to take a monthly fee for 10$ for adults, 5$ for children that must be used to save time money. Please consider above opinions, If possible to run community it will be a lot of help to us. Kindly understand community peoples feelings. Yours sincerely, Trend community.
Dear Sir/Madam,

Greetings to the day! ! ! !

I would like to share in our locality peoples feelings due to closing a sports and leisure public
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centre
. We have been
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utilising
this public
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centre
since 2011, while using the tennis with
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neighbours
at evening time. These collaborations have been such a wonderful experience with them for children and adults, senior citizens too. During
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summer we
associated with kids' activities
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often
. Food distribution,
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Old
clothes distribution had
been provided
by the
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neighbourhood
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people
if there is any occasion in Leisure
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centre
.

Especially
, Games and motivated
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centre
are providing physical fitness and mental health for residence.
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We lucky
to
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get
this council for
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many
years.
In addition
, we gain
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a lot of
friends and
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well wishers
than Senior citizens give their suggestions that will be useful to us in personal life how to lead a life with patients. At evening hour playing a sport that could be
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given
such a relief and
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get
entertainment with family
also
.
Further
more spend
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some
hour knowledge sharing in all subjects.

We heard for the purpose of this closing, saving money, if it is specific reason we all are ready to pay
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some
amount, while
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we using
the local
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centre
then you can save
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little bit
money.
For example
: going to take a monthly fee for
The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "$10".
10$
for adults,
The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "$5".
5$
for children that
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must
be
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used
to save time money.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
consider above opinions, If possible to run community it will be
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a lot of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to us.

Kindly understand community peoples feelings.

Yours
sincerely
,

Trend community.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Mistakes
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IELTS essay Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure centre that it runs, in order to save money. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter • give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre • explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community • describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes v. 1

Essay
  American English
9 paragraphs
262 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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