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Your friend has an opportunity to study in one of the following two types of majors. Which one do you think is better? a. To complete his or her studies and get a job faster b. To study in a major that requires many years of studying but one which would l v.1

Your friend has an opportunity to study in one of the following two types of majors. Which one do you think is better? a. To complete his or her studies and get a job faster b. To study in a major that requires many years of studying but one which would l v. 1
In the day and age, there are various types of university courses can be opted by students, it is a big difference that compared with the previous centuries, for there are a few subjects can be selected such as history, theology and medical science. However, most of the students will study the subjects that related to science and technology because they support that it will be useful in the future and neglect other subjects. Hence, it is important for us to discuss whether it is necessary to study the science courses or study whatever courses they interested. First of all, it is apparent that we cannot assume that all the students can master science courses, for some of them are not sustainable to study it. Those students who tend to interest in liberal arts cannot force them to study the subjects they dislike as they have not the motivation and think that it is only wasting their time. Despite science courses are being popular, some subjects cannot be replaced like literature and music. It is because people who create literature and music obtain the inspiration from nature, human and the things they experienced. Technological machines have not the ability to do this thing as they are just a system that follow the instructions step by step. From another perspective, it is undeniable that the convenience is provided by the advancement of technology, many countries strive hard in the terms of high-tech development. It is good for the students who study science and technology courses due to they can fully grasp the trend nowadays and have the opportunity to increase intern experience in some companies. At that time, they can operate the machines expertly and stable the foundation which is useful in their future job. In conclusion, I think that students study whatever they like is the best choice. If students select the courses they not interested, it is useless to repent after the foregone conclusion. Bearing in mind, the talents come out in every occupation, so that students do not need to be sad at not studying in science subjects
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like literature and music. It is
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some
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they not interested, it is useless to repent after the foregone conclusion. Bearing in mind, the talents
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out in every occupation,
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IELTS essay Your friend has an opportunity to study in one of the following two types of majors. Which one do you think is better? a. To complete his or her studies and get a job faster b. To study in a major that requires many years of studying but one which would l v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
349 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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