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Some People Prefer To Eat At Food Stands Or Restaurants Other People Prefer To Prepare And Eat Food At Home Which Do You Prefer Use Specific Reasons And Examples To Support Your Answer v.1

Some People Prefer To Eat At Food Stands Or Restaurants Other People Prefer To Prepare And Eat Food At Home Which Do You Prefer Use Specific Reasons And Examples To Support Your Answer v. 1
There is no doubt the workforce of a country is one of the key supporter of economic growth. There is an opinion among people that fixed retirement age for all workforce, irrespective of their job is not good, and they believe some worker need to retire and rewarded at a certain age, which I strongly endorse. First and foremost, there are some occupation which requires physical work from the labours which leaves one's muscles to fatigue soon than any other kind of jobs. This is because manual work depends on the human body use of hands and legs and vice versa differ from job to job. A good illustration of this is a machine operator in any factory and a truck driver in the logistics field, the operator needs to handle every metals daily, whereas, a driver need to sit consciously and drive the truck for miles. Finally, this kind of jobs, maybe not bad for physical health right now but day by day there muscles stress more and eventually make them sick. Besides, workers' mental health also getting worse in fewer jobs, whether they are the CEO or manager, for stress it does not matter. This kind of supervisor job role required lots of mental ability to solve complex issues in their organisation, in fact, the key role of managers are critical thinking and problem solving which takes lots of brain work and finally it's stressed out. For example, a study of Indian labours force health and hygiene conducted by all Indian employees' welfare association found that 70 percentage of managers are working under huge stress and they claimed that this will lead to disruption of the Indian economic growth. In conclusion, I believe employees working under physical labour jobs and mental stressful jobs must be given early retirement with appropriate rewards which they own.
There is no doubt the workforce of a country is one of the key supporter of economic growth. There is an opinion among
people
that
fixed
retirement age for all workforce, irrespective of their
job
is not
good
, and they believe
some
worker need to retire and rewarded at a certain age, which I
strongly
endorse.

First
and foremost, there are
some
occupation which requires physical work from the
labours
which
leaves
one's muscles to fatigue
soon
than any other kind of
jobs
. This is
because
manual work depends on the human body
use
of hands and legs and vice versa differ from
job
to
job
. A
good
illustration of this is a machine operator in any factory and a truck driver in the logistics field, the operator needs to handle every metals daily, whereas, a driver need to sit
consciously
and drive the truck for miles.
Finally
, this kind of
jobs
, maybe not
bad
for physical health right
now
but
day by day there muscles
stress
more and
eventually
make
them sick.

Besides
, workers' mental health
also
getting worse in fewer
jobs
, whether they are the CEO or manager, for
stress
it does not matter. This kind of supervisor
job
role required lots of mental ability to solve complex issues in their
organisation
, in fact, the key role of managers
are
critical thinking and problem solving which takes lots of brain work and
finally
it's
stressed
out.
For example
, a study of Indian
labours
force health and hygiene conducted by all Indian employees' welfare association found that 70 percentage of managers are working under huge
stress and
they claimed that this will lead to disruption of the Indian economic growth.

In conclusion
, I believe employees working under physical
labour
jobs
and mental stressful
jobs
must
be
given
early retirement with appropriate rewards which they
own
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some People Prefer To Eat At Food Stands Or Restaurants Other People Prefer To Prepare And Eat Food At Home Which Do You Prefer Use Specific Reasons And Examples To Support Your Answer v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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