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Your company changed to a new uniform. While you like it, there is still something that could be improved about it. Write to your company manager and say– Why do you like the new uniform? – What could be improved about it? – Suggest a way how it can b v.1

Your company changed to a new uniform. While you like it, there is still something that could be improved about it. Write to your company manager and say– Why do you like the new uniform? – What could be improved about it? – Suggest a way how it can b v. 1
Wildlife all over the world are threatened by the human behaviour. A group of people believes that there is no way to amend this scenario whereas, others opine that some effective measures can accomplish reforming this condition. Though all extinct animals are not feasible to bring back, I believe that the cordial endeavour of the government and individuals can lead to a positive outcome. It is irrefutable that humans have done irreversible damages to the whole ecosystem. Numerous species have lost their habitat permanently for the reason of deforestation, which has put the entire ecosystem in danger. For example, a recent report generated by NATGEO has suggested that nearly two thousand imperiled species of plants and animals went extinct in the Amazon rainforest as a consequent of deforestation in the last decade. Thus, humans have nothing to do to get back these genera that have lost. For this reason, many people assert that there is nothing to do to improve the situation of wildlife. On the contrary, there is still time to keep wildlife safe by taking some fruitful action. At first, the government should take an initiative for preventing deforestation. An unauthorized cutting of the forest trees should be stopped immediately. It should be made a punishable offence. In case of authorization of the government for felling of trees for acres of forest, then the equal area of land should be planted with stapling of trees to make up the loss in the long run. Apart from that, individuals also spread awareness about the destructive effect that some of our activities have on the planet. In conclusion, animal kingdom around the universe are affected negatively by the people’s actions. Some people claim that there is nothing to do to for changing this background while others believe that this structure can be remodeled by taking some important step. In my opinion, If the government and the people themselves try to protect the wildlife sincerely, then it can be changed despite some genera are not possible to get back.
Wildlife all over the world
are threatened
by the human
Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviour' is British English.
behaviour
. A group of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
believes that there is no way to amend this scenario whereas, others opine that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
effective measures can accomplish reforming this condition. Though all extinct animals are not feasible to bring back, I believe that the cordial
Possible spelling mistake. 'endeavour' is British English.
endeavour
of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
and individuals can lead to a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
outcome.

It is irrefutable that humans have done irreversible damages to the whole ecosystem. Numerous species have lost their habitat
permanently
for the reason of deforestation, which has put the entire ecosystem in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
danger
.
For example
, a recent report generated by
Possible spelling mistake found.
NATGEO
has suggested that
nearly
two thousand imperiled species of plants and animals went extinct in the Amazon rainforest as a consequent of deforestation in the last decade.
Thus
, humans have nothing to do to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
back these genera that have lost.
For this reason
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
assert that there is nothing to do to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the situation of wildlife.

On the contrary
, there is
still
time to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
wildlife safe by taking
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
fruitful action. At
first
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
should take an initiative for preventing deforestation. An unauthorized cutting of the forest trees should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stopped
immediately. It should
be made
a punishable
Possible spelling mistake. 'offence' is British English.
offence
. In case of authorization of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
for felling of trees for acres of forest, then the equal area of land should
be planted
with stapling of trees to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
up the loss in the long run. Apart from that, individuals
also
spread awareness about the destructive effect that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
of our activities have on the planet.

In conclusion
, animal kingdom around the universe are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
negatively
by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people’s
actions.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
claim that there is nothing to do to for changing this background while others believe that this structure can
be remodeled
by taking
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
step. In my opinion, If the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
themselves try to protect the wildlife
sincerely
, then it can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
despite
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
genera are not possible to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
back.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Your company changed to a new uniform. While you like it, there is still something that could be improved about it. Write to your company manager and say– Why do you like the new uniform? – What could be improved about it? – Suggest a way how it can b v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
338 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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